Ricochet

Ricochet

 

I don’t like the ending.

It started out promising,

then,

it just ended…….

It stopped and oozed all over the floor.

It stored itself within a stain,

A painful prick in the eye of the beholder,

smoldering even death to its start.

 

With its jagged edge,

and crystal deceit,

I slowly came to believe…..

 

Foretold is that which prompts eternal unrest,

lying in seething pools of comatose awareness.

Behold the expulsion of freedom,

the tiny fragments laced with narcissistic nonsense.

Be mindful the reflection of a bleak existence,

for it may display a disguised mosaic,

littered across the divine secrets of your porcelain path.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh my Amber you really display such boldly painful emotions here, very blunt but creatively... I especially found this part rather jolting...

A painful prick in the eye of the beholder,
smoldering even death to its start.

you certainly described just how it feel to be betrayed like I have never seen before.

[Forest Green]

Nothing is ever truly put to rest, but resurrects itself during times of inadequacy. Choices must be made then, based upon the logic presented by the merging of past and present. Emotional turmoil is a war of the worst kind.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Amazing. Seriana, you were always one of my favorites. I haven't heard from you in a while. great poem. im putting it in my bookshelf. I loved the metaphorical feel of it, i know I tend to write similarly. good job.

[Sean M. Addams]

i like the style of this piece alot..very creative... overall i thought you did a great job on this very deep and filled with emotion... a very strong write..nice work!!!

[deeps]

This is just full of emotion here. I like this write so very much. I like the font you used on this write. Very well put together.

[An owl on the moon]

Such beautiful words that yet convey an amazing pain.. grief for what was.. A world that held wonder and promise, and then collapsed upon itself. You use flawless form to let us all somehow share in this heartache. Amazing!

[Legion]

It is indeed a lie that will truly lead to the truth, but the cost. Oh, the cost. Wonderfully done for such a subject. I especially delighted (for want of a better word considering the topic) in the last stanza. Well done.

[Kelley]

beware of the path you lead I guess.
This was great poem! I like your words
and they made me think that life is too
short. So don't waste it.

Thanks for sharing Amber

Kelley