Fully

Just messing around here. :) trying to cheer myself up on a crabby day.

Fully

 

Why do they tell me naught?

It is not for they that I lie in wait.

Tis not thine heart that aches so vivid a knot

 

Is it not mine flesh which bleeds the most?

Tis the many which speak the most,

Yet, the few which feel…

 

and reel

 

in an electrifying

 

psychedelic

 

spell-binding

 

supersonic wave

 

of chaotic

 

love-bursting

 

reality shattering

 

divergent moments

 

of fever-burning

 

spiral-descending

 

cosmic authenticity!!!

 

Ahem…

If only twas as simple as mine words…

Ahhh, that the best would come through a simple wish,

to be completely and admirably …

understood.

 

 

Reviews

[A Lost Man Found]

excellent diction!it truly was
"electrifying
psychedelic
spell-binding"
love the word choice, love the mix of new and old english, it gets a thumbs up from me.

[Drifter]

It was rather interesting, your blend of modern English and old(er) English. My mind is drawing a blank as to what the actual name is... at the moment, anyway. It's been a while since I've seen the use of words such as twas and naught. It is definately a memorable piece, though the subject might come often initially as a bit confusing. Still, nothing that reading it over and over won't cure. Bravo.

[Mark]

Although I found the mixture of Elizabethan and Modern English confusing, I TOTALLY get your mood here...and therfore the poem can only be judged a success. Your Confusion, your Resentment, your Anger; a few minor grammatical errors cannot hide these! Then at the end, when you sense yourself losing control, and still have the presence of mind to reel yourself in, that is a wonderful message to any who would despair in moments of trial, to remember that the really are but moments, and Life goes ON!!
On a personal note, I glean from your revised Bio that you're not feeling on your A-game, these days. That is of course regrettable, but remember, if being "completely and admirably understood" was "as easy as thy words", from where would we gather any "cosmic authenticity"?
Or in other words, Be Strong. Pray. Take heart. It'll Pass!

[Flow~]

Um... you were just messing around here? ha

I love the mix of english that you used, it was like being in the past then being thrown into the present and then returned to the past again. It gave your poem a flow that was unique. I love this one. I could feel how reserved she was and then in the middle she let her hair down until the end when she re-reserved herself all lady like. LOL Excellent write~

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

nice job. i always enjoy your poems because you have such a distinct style, and it's def above average. this poem i understand, i sometimes wish people could fully understand me too. thanks for sharing amber.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Very contemporary but with great, modern style and words!

"and reel
in an electrifying
psychedelic
spell-binding
supersonic wave
of chaotic
love-bursting
reality shattering
divergent moments
of fever-burning
spiral-descending
cosmic authenticity!!!"

I love the mixture you give. You're always full of surprises and I can't say that about many artists!

[Poetic Injustice]

Passionate movement. A fever pitch. Nicely wrought. These are the pieces that invoke in me ... many things ... artistic ... romantic. Thanks! =0)

[Blue Sky]

completely charming piece
your poetry made me smile
with the notion of where you stand
and I'll read you anytime...while
you my dear, stand out with my admiration for you
awesome stuff!!

[Phoenix]

This didn't seem very clear to me...but it reminds of how I feel on those miserable, lonely, stir-crazy type of days :/

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I understand where you are coming from, to feel complete in your passion you ned someone who can feel it and handle it... with the passion you have you deserve that intense devotion.