Love

Love

 

What of it if it shreds you?

What worth is placed in a dream-killer?

Of all the things beautiful…

Of all things good and pure…

This should have been the one that hurt the least,

the one that brought the most joy,

the last….and the only.

 

But, twas not to be.

Instead,

it ripped through my life

twisting me through the tomb of death

leaving nothing…

but the distorted remains of my broken dreams

 

Reviews

[Poetic Injustice]

Ouch. Though I've felt my greatest pain from love gone bad I still hold out the greatest hope for true love found. My heart still tells me so. Color me the blissful fool of love. Now that I've offered my heart's perspective, let me get down to the piece at hand. I think it is honest, well created and delivered. Thank you.

[Brianna Brie]

Instead,
it ripped through my life
twisting me through the tomb of death
leaving nothing�
but the distorted remains of my broken dreams

Raw and emotional....simply stated love should be a comfort and yet it often strips away our flesh to the bare bone. Riveting write.

[Callum]

Hey this is really good. it makes me think.

[An owl on the moon]

The anguish is overwhelming in your words, grasping for love but feeling the pain of rejection, alienation, and remorse of something so foreign... So bitter, each line...

[Brandon]

Very nicely done Amber. Great write as usual.

[DF]

Raw emotion with evocative images! Nice final line: "distorted remains of broken dreams." This isn't your Valentine's poem is it?

[just is]

Wow! So nicely written and I can really feel the emotion in this write.

it ripped through my life
twisting me through the tomb of death
leaving nothing�
but the distorted remains of my broken dreams

I like these lines here, Love is a silent killer really, but it's great when you fall.
When you give all you have and can't give any more what elese is there to try.
You done a subperb piece here.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love? Yeah it is something else... it can give you strength in moments of weakness, make you smile when in pain but as you so masterfully stated here it can also be a killer when your dream love turns into a nightmare leaving you with so many questions and doubts...

it ripped through my life
twisting me through the tomb of death
leaving nothing�

wow so rawly stated... very nicely done again my friend.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

This is pretty darn good. It gives a searing picture of your angst which I feel intensely. It helps, that I know this angst. But that does not lessen the impact.

Very visceral!