Fallen Legend

Fallen Legend

 

You could never see the silver lining

          through the pining of your broken dreams

So you escaped,

beneath….

hiding so much of yourself inside,

and…

as the crimson clouds swooned earthward,

I could not help but morn your heart

A fragile vessel with so much life,

          So much………………..love

A vessel that would never sail the tangerine skies

 

Even now, as this moment comes to an end,

I long to carry your ship to far distant shores,

          to float on the wind of every forever…

                   to glide, above….

          There….just below the arch of Heaven’s light.

But nevermore will it be…

for as the rolling meadows pass over your fallen life,

          your descending star drifts, beyond

into the whispered silence of a fading memory

 

Reviews

[Dani California]

Amber, this is tragic yet beautiful. I think the last stanza really did me -- bravo on a great ending. The emotion and passion is strong throughout. Very nice. :)

I think this piece would be perfect if you laid it out in a basic format (- the dots and whatnot). But either way or whatever you decide, it's a great piece.

Well done my dear.

[Cardinal Robin]

Like An Laech I felt that this poem fit him, but more so the first part is your inner voice speaking to you. Read it again up until "to glide above" as though someone wrote this for you and you'll see what I mean. Perhaps the last part is fitting also as long as you consider the notion that in order to become who you are you must come to know who you are not. The nurturer, creator, and the Love in your words in this voice are what I "hear" when I read any of your better poems. Goddess, juggernaut, Amber. ;p

[An owl on the moon]

Passionate and profoud... Your words reach across the universe, so exalting love, so mourning loss... So very beautiful!

[An Laech]

This one holds a lot of meaning for me. Its almost as if it was written for me. Another beautiful work my friend. This one almost brought tears to my eyes.

-Chad-

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

So you escaped,
beneath�.
hiding so much of yourself inside,
and�
as the crimson clouds swooned earthward,


Amber you always mesmerize me with the gracefulness of you words...
we can be a victim of our own emotions when we let them completely take over and we ignore all logic and intelligent thinking.

The second verse is heartwarming with you wanting to save this person from themselves.
You are poetic bliss my friend.

[Moods]

Instrinsically accurate and lyrically complete.

Fondness can be measured by the depths of sadness when the object of our affections as well as the feelings themselves, begin to fall.

Well done...

S

[Arthur Crow]

I can't believe I am the first to comment on this... I was greatly struck by the longing and passion in your words. Full of so many great line like this:
"A vessel that would never sail the tangerine skies"

Your word crafting is simply exquisite, and you express so much depth of emotion. Really feeling the soul speak in this spill. Beautiful structure and flow.