Vantage Point

Observations, part 2

Vantage Point

 

Always in such a hurry

a scurried frenzy of activity

to…

and fro

It’s the way you go

A slow paranoid cadence

twittering of digits

When your eyes are fidgeting

back and forth as you think

deep in tinkering thought

Always moving on

to the next best thing

If only you’d see

the best things

here…

are right before my eyes

And I stare

and I watch you

observing

image preserving

with a curving smirk on my face

And what I see

pauses me

Ancient cities of gold

A fortress gone cold

buried beneath a fortified defense

silent warrior of false pretense

Begging subconsciously

for gentle rediscovery

 

Then…

you look up at me

with crystals of icy blue

And the eventide light

reflects from the oceans of your eyes

A haunting reflection of you

and the ballads of night

swing low to the rhythm of your breathing

The sheathing of your palace sword

And I sigh

inside..

and smile as you ask, “what?”

and I just shake my head

remaining all the while

speechless….

Because one simple glance from you

emits poetry in motion

a blend of fear and absolute devotion

You’ve stolen the twilight tides

leaving everything in silent stillness

and in the privacy of my thoughts

A swirling liquid warmth washes over

What I wouldn’t give

for you

desperately…

If only

you could see you…

 

from my point of view

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This superb, beautiful, technically wonderful. There's so much passion and longing in your words. For some reason the word 'what?' stands out for me, that un-knowledge of how you're feeling, the single casual word when someone doesn't understand why you're looking in a certain way, can't understand that you want to be within that other person's thoughts and spirit.

'You've stolen the twilight tides / leaving everything in silent stillness / and in the privacy of my thoughts /
A swirling liquid warmth washes over / What I wouldn't give / for you / desperately�'

Wonderful

[Janice Ann]

Okay, so here I am reading this, and I can imagine saying this to someone I love dearly...and this little poem left me SPEECHLESS...Desperately...Great write my dear...great write indeed!

Janice

[Ocean Orchid]

I agree with Dani, Stunning ..... thought provoking .... excellent expressions ... !

[An owl on the moon]

Such a beautiful, deep, reflective write that carried me through time and space so effortlessly... You make amazing worlds with each word and phrase... So wonderful!!!

Craig

[Dani California]

Amber, I am amazingly calm and somber after reading this, and it must be the mood I am in, because truly... this piece dug deep. It's brilliant. Generally, after reading one of your works such as as this, where the emotions seem to swing by and pick me up for the ride, I am pumped up and emotionally animated when it drops me off at the end. This time, I am calm. Though probably near shedding a tear or two. Why? I'm not sure. But this is a touching piece -- at a level deeper than I am able to express right now.

Stunning my friend. Truly... stunning.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Ancient cities of gold

A fortress gone cold

buried beneath a fortified defense

silent warrior of false pretense

Begging subconsciously

for gentle rediscovery

Wow! I bet you read this part back to yourself and went, "That is incredible!": at least I did. this whole poem actually. i put it in my favorites. It is true, I know I have been at fault for blowing up a man, in my mind, looking at him longingly, batting my eyes, and he loves the attention, but all the while not seeing what makes him so damn amazing.......hee hee.

great job ,,,,you did it again! your fan.

kena

[Kiddx]

A haunting reflection of you
and the ballads of night
swing low to the rhythm of your breathing

I like these lines really well, this is a beautiful write here, sensual too. emotions are well expressed,