Hush

Hush 

 

I didn't know what to say today. 

My mind felt paralyzed...exhaustively blushed. 

I wasn’t even sure if I was real anymore. 

Maybe, 

maybe I was a figment of my very own imagination? 

A splendid, 

wondrous creation and expression... 

If my mind would just move again so I could think, 

though, 

not thinking before I speak. 

yet... 

today I am stilled to quiet, 

a silent, soft echo seen in a crisp, autumn breeze. 

I tried writing a beautiful poem. 

I tried sharing the words that would not come, 

to get them out of my head. 

They felt heavy there, 

these silly words, 

their weight beyond my reach. 

But they were stuck. 

Like stubborn droplets of rain lodged up inside stormy clouds, 

drooping with swollen tears awaiting their release. 

So. 

I sat. 

I sat in the hushed moment again, 

watching the remains of the day, 

as the rainbow-painted sky smeared into the harvest night, 

the purling of crickets threatening my dreamy sleep. 

Author's Note

Photo by Mike Enerio on Unsplash

Reviews

[Kunst]

I like how accessible the language is here. There's no frills, and sometimes I think poems can become bogged down by that.

There's something very real and dare I say, vulnerable about this piece. It connects on many different levels and I really appreciate that about it.

Thank you for sharing this, I enjoyed the read very much.

[Seriana]

Thank you! Yes, was not so frilly, more a rambling of thoughts in the current moment. One of those moments where one is unsure and not at all solid, yet the pieces are afloat in the mind and need somewhere to go. Appreciate your kind review!

[Twilight]

Kunst mentioned how accessible the language is here, and yet far more reticent about what you are actually seeking to express.

Of course, only the writer knows for sure. It does seem to portray a woman, who is sifting through her thoughts and feelings; at a given moment in time (today as specified).

Despite that vulnerability, it may well be just passing; or down to an experience which has charged her emotional side. So, readers should not just assume; that the protagonist should be saddled with a "vulnerable" label.

Emotional sensitivity can and does, have advantages in life; and helps to develop and deepen our understanding. Also, it can help us both to enjoy and experience joyous moments - that bit more strongly.

As so often with your writing, you have linked this beautifully with metaphors from nature itself; and our earth's weather. Thankyou, for sharing; Amber.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Wow! Loved this! I was particularly drawn by your strong imagery induced by the phraseology of the piece. And the ending was just perfect. I have a poem titled by the same name, though vastly different. It's always interesting to see where similar titles lead or how each poet might handle a particular prompt differently. This was simply great.

[June bug]

Sounds like writers block a tad, enjoyed your write

[Seriana]

Thank you, dear. Somewhat of a writer's block, but more of a "what do I do with these thoughts and feelings"? Appreciate you stopping by as always.

[emmajoygreen]

Breathtakingly emotional, immense depths, devotion, sincerity and, more.
'My mind felt paralyzed ... exhaustively blushed. I wasn’t even sure if I was real any more'

[Seriana]

Somehow I missed several of these reviews...so sorry. Thank you for your review, Em. Always.

[emmajoygreen]

Am rarely upset to have a belated thank you.. is twice blessed when it does arrive! Take care, keep safe and happy. Always too.

[Chris Shaw]

I called again to read this beauty. You are so talented at conveying emotion. I felt every word in this piece. Those times if quiet are when we learn most. Lovely poetry dear poet.

Chris

[Seriana]

Thank you Chris! Love that you called again! And enjoyed.

[Dave]

How infrequently come those truly quiet times? Those times when we are alone in our thoughts, our dreams
even our desires. Still, in those times we come to see the need to express ourselves. Nicely expressed Seriana.
Take care - Dave

[Seriana]

Thank you Dave. So glad you enjoyed!

[John the Baptist]

Sometimes all you can do in the face of a block is sit. Don't struggle with the thing. It will pass.

[Seriana]

Thank you for your review John!