Undercurrent

Undercurrent 

Cold, 

Alone. 

Lying in the listless dark  

languishing in languid lulls of loneliness... 

So quiet.  

The tune on my arms dances with silent thumping ghosts, 

Unseen...but there... 

My hair stands at full attention, 

trailing the frail drop of my neck... 

as the pressure around me descends, 

I sense a sinister presence squeeze in from the all-around space in between. 

It’s 3:42 am 

(Or was it) 

When the11:08 clock captures my distraction, 

and I’m back here, 

in a sodden sweat, 

glistening in the shadowed moonlight,  

sneaking through the slivered space of silken shades. 

For a moment, 

their shape is a perfect person, 

and I swear it moves as if to grab me.... 

I gasp, 

choke, 

stifle back the near curdled scream. 

Electric panic courses through the prickled phantoms on my arms. 

An instant only it lasts, 

then settles in silent satisfaction. 

A blink, 

A yawn, 

a turn of the covers 

and the air shifts once more... 

to a clock that was never even there. 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Powerfully felt thru vivid descriptive writing! Nicely lyrical and horrific blended together. A fun Halloween scenario seemingly drawn from real life. I do not like this phrase becuz the two words mean the same thing: "languishing in languid" . . . (((HUGS)))

[Mk.t.g]

"A blink,
A yawn,
a turn of the covers
and the air shifts once more...
to a clock that was never even there."
Wonderful lines above, Seriana! Your property tends to convey emotions and messages in such an awe-inspiring manner. I am a big admirer of your poems, Seriana! Thanks for sharing!
Mk.t.g

[Seriana]

Thank you Mk!!! Really love that you're digging my writing. Happy that it inspires. Thank you again!

[Mk.t.g]

You're Welcome, Seriana!

[K writes]

Wow, I like the part of ghosts lingering around, emotional read, nicely written

[Vertigo Cat1111]

You're absolutely amazing at conveying emotions through poetry and painting a wonderful picture with words. Your poems I find, take situations we often have in everday life and make a beautiful, obviously poetic piece, full of far more thought than anyone else would think to put in, and I think that's one of that things that makes your writing so unique and so, so good! I love how it shows the different times in this piece, it perfectly executes that feeling of staying up, fearfully. Ridden with nightmares, worries, anxiety and such, you convey it in such a brilliant way. Thank you for sharing and take care! (: I hope you're staying safe.

[Seriana]

Thank you so much for your thoughtful review! I love seeing you stop by :) Thanks again.
read moreThank you so much for your thoughtful review! I love seeing you stop by :) Thanks again.

Safe here, hoping the same for you. World feels a bit off these days. One day at a time!

[Paul Bell]

It is amazing how something hung up in the light suddenly comes alive in the dark.
It's even more amazing how said object always appears to be coming towards you, and that usually sends you nuts.

[Seriana]

Thank you Paul! I missed this somehow. So glad you enjoyed and commented!

[emmajoy]

There are times when all our stress erupt, needing to be dealt with, needing to escape.. but first, there's the escape route to organise.. and this, the above, is what happens. ' The tune on my arms dances with silent thumping ghosts, - Unseen...but there... - My hair stands at full attention, - trailing the frail drop of my neck... '

For me that is the crisis point.. suddenly arrived.. there to take over before... finally... taking its leave but - not before loosing its grip. The finish is inertia.. numbness.. ' and the air shifts once more - to a clock that was never even there.. '

Brilliantly written.. read twice, should have know better - it held me a little too long.. perhaps like the present heat, which surrounds and intrudes... and there's nothing one can do until.. ! Too true to life. - gripping, finely written, expertly laid.

[Seriana]

There you are...LOVE your interpretation here, Em. Quite striking. I always enjoy your thoughts, comments, words. In any way you share them. They are a gift, as are you. Thank you for reviewing again!

[Tina]

Spooky poem, I hate the dark that's why I sleep with the lamp on LOL

[Seriana]

Amen Tina! Sometimes I still cover my head when I'm scared, lol. Glad you enjoyed. Thank you!

[Tina]

Your welcome

[jacob erin-cilberto]

something that can scare the bejesus out of us...real or not.
we fall back to sleep, but feel life's unease...and it continues to penetrate our dreams...
the clock of my existence ticks and time gets very confused.
My hair stood up with this one.
j.

[Seriana]

Oh goodness, the moments when I've thought an object in my home were a person? Some of the most terrifying! And funny when you think about it. Sheesh, our minds. Confusion indeed, my friend. The mind is an intricate network! Thank you, again, for your review. I so very much appreciate it!

[John the Baptist]

Is this a nightmare? A hallucination? A demonic possession? We are left to make our own choice, although the last lines seem to indicate there was nothing to be alarmed about. The use of alliteration in this one really captures the eye.

[Seriana]

Ever have those moments when something spooks you? Awake, or half asleep? This was written as a combination of anything that is a figment of our imagination. Thanks for the review John. Appreciate you!

[Chris Shaw]

A ghostly tale. Is it a dream or is it reality taking place? Some excellent alliteration here Seriana. Very atmospheric with its descending pressure and moonlight. Enjoyed the read. Great title.Thank you.

Chris

[Seriana]

Hi Chris. Thanks for your kind review. Always love seeing you around. :)
Amber

[Chris Shaw]

Good to see you too :)