A place of Silence

A place of Silence

A Poem by Serene Star




Impressions to expressions
Words that sit still

Gathering weight in silence
An asset of none existence

Those dependencies of thought
Returned unaddressed 

If it was understood
By the average man

Standing to be of ordinary
Placement

That rare diamond 
Of Deflecting color

Sharp to come by
Too far to grasp

Valuing all
It stood a chance

Of Misevaluation

The misfits 
Of pure genius 

Observing the crowd
From 

A place of Silence 

© 2020 Serene Star


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I found your request in my RR box, so here goes....a place of silence is sometimes a nice place to dwell, especially if we have no words to share or shout from the rooftops. Its nice to observe and watch things from afar, but eventually our silence must be replaced by words, else we do risk becoming misevaluated. The best place is probably somewhere between the extremes of silence and noise. An interesting poem, Serene. Certainly one to ponder! :))

Posted 4 Years Ago


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4 Years Ago

Thanks Jamila



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Nicely written reminded me of the song the sounds of silence. It made you drift.

Posted 3 Years Ago


your last five lines, stands out as a keeper in my mind and intrigued me so. This is a well written descriptive write....

Posted 4 Years Ago


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4 Years Ago

Thank you Kymberleigh
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The misfits
Of pure genius

Observing the crowd
From

A place of Silence

I LOVE this part,this is so very good. Very nicely written

Posted 4 Years Ago


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4 Years Ago

Thanks Rye
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LJ
"Impressions to expressions
Words that sit still..."

I like those phrases very much, especially "words that sit still" - a commanding image that works.
It made me think of a world-famous phrase = 'the sound of silence.' It's excellent wording here.

"...Gathering weight in silence
An asset of none existence..."
Do you mean "non-existence"? Or is the word 'none' meant to convey a new idea...that somehow there is an 'asset' that equals 'none'? I got confused about that.

I really like this part too:
"Valuing all
It stood a chance

Of Misevaluation"

I think in some cases, writers often value all in order to see them clearly and describe them well.
You describe silence in several good images... but, as a writer, you're also taking action. You must describe something, and in doing so, you break the silence. It's a dichotomy I appreciate. One is observant, yes, but one also acts on what they see, even to describe a place removed from action.
Thanks for sharing this!
PS. I had to write this twice, because I lost part of it the first time. Sorry.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Serene Star

4 Years Ago

its ok lol
thanks
LJ

4 Years Ago

yeah... and you're very welcome
sometimes there are no words or words are misinterpreted. better to think before we speak - must choose our words carefully or say nothing at all. as the old saying goes - silence is golden.

The misfits
Of pure genius

Observing the crowd
From

A place of Silence

sometimes silence says a lot - with a deep roar. interesting, thought-provoking piece ... :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Serene Star

4 Years Ago

Thanks Pete
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I found your request in my RR box, so here goes....a place of silence is sometimes a nice place to dwell, especially if we have no words to share or shout from the rooftops. Its nice to observe and watch things from afar, but eventually our silence must be replaced by words, else we do risk becoming misevaluated. The best place is probably somewhere between the extremes of silence and noise. An interesting poem, Serene. Certainly one to ponder! :))

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Serene Star

4 Years Ago

Thanks Jamila
Great thoughts often go unexpressed for want of the right words. And sometimes the words are there but they remain unwritten and unspoken for want of interpretation and appreciation. Rare is the genius that gets them all. So they linger in silence. Loved this!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Serene Star

4 Years Ago

Thanks PestonJee
ahhhh ... speaks many volumes .... the misfits, perfect ending, totally relatable .... and when we look within, the magic begins :D


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Serene Star

4 Years Ago

Lovely review - thanks KWP
Beautifully expressed, loved your words ;-]

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Serene Star

4 Years Ago

Thank you WW

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