"if you want to dance with a man-sized banana
on the edge of a woman-sized universe,
as golden stars explode inside of your river mouth,
and purple dogs sing Martian church hymns backwards,
where thewarrior moon gives birth to madness
and the KoolAid tastes like naked daylight,
then, perhaps,
you have arrived at your destination.
perhaps ewe half knot."
I love it.. pure and simple. I'm not sure it was suppose to make me smile and laugh a bit but it did.. xo :) xx
great poem but you open for serious debate, some points I agree with and some I don't, poetry to me means different things to different people and here you are labeling it, almost a contradiction, I have read some poems with hard facts that truly dazzled the senses, and poems like yours that play with words to bring magic to the imagination, it depends on how a person interprets poetry and what kind of poetry appeals to the individual, see a debate lol, R.G. your work is always above great and you have a gift, a true wordsmith you are, hey I always read your stuff even if I don't comment, and I truly enjoyed this.
I agree with ya, Roarke. That part felt a bit mucky. I killed it, and replaced it with an awkward monster....that's a cureall for sure...HAHAHAHAHA!
Cheers!
if you want to dance with a man-sized banana
on the edge of a woman-sized universe,
as golden stars explode inside of your river mouth,
and purple dogs sing Martian church hymns backwards,
where thewarrior moon gives birth to madness
and the KoolAid tastes like naked daylight,
If that isn't the pitch synopsis to a Cohen brother's movie... I don't know what is.
It's amazing how you can always make both the wheat and the chaff palatable.
I might not use the he/she thing here, the piece is too good although it does designate the common alienation of ubiquitous relationships, it also distracts... I know, because I've done it myself.... lol.
so like, you know... you should like write poetry and stuff....
i like this a lot. it goes from explaining and griping to the perfect kind of crazy associated with you and the last line makes everything fall into place. wonderfully executed.
Pure brilliance penned and i love watching these wingless flies roll on the page. The perfect description of true poetry and understanding. I think my favorite line was, '
if you don’t ‘get it,’
then considered this:
maybe it wasn’t given to you.
maybe you have to earn it.'
Pure brilliance.