one final furious flicker

one final furious flicker

 

1

surface swelters

glows orange with hatred

charring nerve-endings

pupils project hellfire

war teeth bared

humanity explodes

into shrapnel confetti

pain swarms like

flies at fresh

rot

 

 

2

it is the final moment

a death pang of love

beaten into submission

like iron

whiskey reigns tyrannical

dark tidings slither

over warm smiles

blistered soul

walks the fire-rock

alone

 

 

3

he whispers her name

like a sweaty hex

her face appears

a lie

a slander

a life melts

like candle wax

into the achy redness

a menacing shadow

exorcised

by the sunrise

 

4

nobody saw him die

we just all sort of knew

it was over

 

5

parts of her

will never fully

heal

the scar is shaped

like a man’s

hand

it stretches from

Lockport to Gross Tette

her home has gone

from burn ward

to mass grave

 

 

 

Reviews

[L. Edward Neale]

Wow, powerful stuff. Enjoyed it immensely. The central character bears some ambiguity it seems it could be a war victim or even the conciousness of the earth its self suffering the destructive tyranny of man. Cheers for the heads up. Keep those requests coming.

[Aehr]

Sad.. but beautiful... enjoyed this one!

[kingblaq]

so sad n powerful. Loved it
WRITE ON!!

[Liana]

Powerful and very sad. I loved it

[stars are far]

This is so nice ..and these are powerful stuff..
well done ..
keep it up...btw it's shape attracted me .. great choice ;)

[Octob3r Star]

The scene was intense. Cheers

[☯]

This poem is different, in a good way. First, I really liked the format and the design you laid out here, it's definitely catchy to the eye at first sight. Actually, it's the first I've ever seen on my time here like this. Putting that aside, the poem itself was dark and mysterious. It definitely held something back, or left it aside. Like stretching your hand towards an object and pulling it back. I liked the flow and the description. Really good write, loved it! :)

[Dark Poetry]

Nicely done.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. I had to read a few times. A powerful and sad story. Took me on a deep and sad journey in the poem. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[joshua deathdealer]

I too enjoyed the dramatic feel and the rhyme scheme worked very well here. Excellent work.