Flavoraid

follow a haunted forest into the quiet trees,

stroke live hot disease just for a thrill.

swallow a jagged chorus of psychosocial madness,

smother sadness with the seer’s stone.

 

naked body of evidence

writhes upon the altar.

flesh carved from angelic fluff,

eyes of a demonic warlord.

 

kiss the moral equinox;

darkness dances with love;

snake and dove in marital congress

venom takes cherub wings.

 

oh how the robotic children sing!

songs of hypnotic devotion.

oceans of bodies carpet the rickety church

where god became a hole.

 

slide from existential ache

into quickly slaughtered numbness.

acid drops of honey-warmth

onto the Devil’s tongue.

 

follow a brazen comet into the frozen divide,

darkness of an unknown sort worn as funeral shroud.

unheralded regalia emblazoned into empty space,

chase the rabbit through black briar, until all flesh is gone.

Reviews

[roarke]

I think the last stanza should follow the first. You're not gonna like this, then take make the 5th the third then the 2nd next.... the last remaining stanza's could be interchangeable for the end stanza. Just the way I see it, Definitely the last stanza should follow the first though.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Powerful stuff.

[Tim Lion]

okay bud. I'm with professor Roarke to a point.....maybe even moreso.

I'd scrap everything except stanzas 3 through 5. then, maybe shuffle them a bit. but that 4th stanza is a stand-alone screamer. the first and last seem like bricks tied to the head and feet.......b*****d won't swim that-a-way. free him up. let em kick. you know I hate revision....but, sometimes you gotta give a misfit a haircut before the big date.

much love.