enter

Renee said, "I truly believe that people have become so desensitized by everything that they don't see things for what they are." That idea inspired this piece.

 

 

enter

 

enter my crawlspace:

deep, deeper still,

until chills sink teeth into marrow of soul.

 

heady wormhole as cold as a dead man’s kiss;

frozen torture-bliss for this near nerveless heart.

 

take apart the apparatus that still pretends to feel,

roll the steel gears in your warm little hands.

 

the sad man who once lived in this haunted machine

has melted away into the metal and grease,

 

and ceased the rusty tearstains that painted the hull

and the ghostly love songs mulling about the main deck.

 

splayed wreckage of his life has been scrapped for parts;

the remainder sleeps down in a forever abyss.

 

twist your long hot fingers around in my hair,

rub every pale inch of my joyless machine,

 

breathe acrid steam that rises from my engine room core.

adore what is left of my human façade.

 

pray to your fleshy god that you’ll never be as unique

as I am.

 

damned to trudge though an internal tundra

until the flywheels grind to mechanical halt,

 

and, then, hope hard that no-one can fix me.

Reviews

[Moflo]

Very nicely written, I do agree that our society has become so de-sensitized that complex, heavy things can be marginalized into a mere glimmer of time. (Reminded me of that one quote in Frost/Nixon about this). Anyway very nicely written, great descriptions, and as always, fantastic word play. Good work.

[KAREN]

I like the roads you cause me to travel on when I read your work. This poem is very strong and powerful!

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

This is so amazing to read if you go through it very slowly and just imagine everything literally. I really enjoyed it and I agree with Renee, whoever she is.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A tough one to comprehend, not the wording, it's perfect as always but the fact that we cage our selves in this thinking is frightening to say the least.

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

You are a great player of words to twist a tale so deep. I enjoyed reading it very much with all it's twist and turns.

[MuSe Ampoule]

You're so hot, you put the sun to shame. My words inspired this??? wow. (speechless) I seek you out to feel and you knock me over. Fantastic!

"twist your long hot fingers around in my hair,
rub every pale inch of my joyless machine," This part really sticks to my ribs, but the whole thing was delicious!

[Ruth]

Hon, all I can say is great line that influenced this piece! And what a freakin spin! EXCELLENT! xx

[Kerry O'Connor]

Deus ex machina - if you'll forgive a slight distortion of meaning..

[AngelAfterlife]

very nice.. good job.. :o)

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

there is such strength and power in this piece.. god.. i've missed reading your work. you always pull up the edge of the carpet to see what is truly lurking underneath.. intensely creepy, and incredibly vivid