nightmare reruns

fallen cigarette cherry

to wildfire tsunami

that closes at the speed

of darkness.

 

I fight oncoming Hell

with water gun tears,

 

and wonder when I'll forget

what you've done

                           to me.

Reviews

[Linear]

I dont really have much to say to this, I can neither add nor subtract anything from it.........It's a love story I guess, something has gone wrong and the nightmare is back to haunt.........then again I am quite often completely wrong, the whole point being is really that I enjoyed the read and the puzzle it left in my mind :O]

[Lilly Negoi]

my guess - never...considering the way this poem sounds.

[Moflo]

Great! I love the contradictions of the couplet in the middle and the first two lines. I love your surreal images, they really make the poetry come alive and wrap the reader in. Great work.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

knee buckling~

[What happened to simple..]

From here it's like staring out numbly, watching all the effects go down. My first instinct was pray about it.

[Kerry O'Connor]

Ouch! Painful to the touch.

[.......]

Now I liked this one alot,
This is Blazin' hot!
Very nicely written.

[Rene Velez]

WOW NICE WORDPLAY AND IMAGERY, GOOD JOB, SORRY ABOUT THE CAPS LOCK, IT'S STUCK LOL