Conclusions

a troublesome and and awkward farewell

Conclusions

 

(you shouldn’t have come here alone)

                                 thanks for visiting.

 

 remove your 3-d eyeballs,

                   put your ugly red pants back on,

                         tell me I’m a naughty little critter,

                                    take your empty victims to the trash.

 

(run away before I scream something vulgar)

 

shhh.

       come closer.

              I’m about to burst into flames.

 

(sprinkle my ashes into an envelope,

mail me to Jesus’ defense attorney) #evidence

 

forget that this crooked bird ever flew

through your cozy little cell.

 

  *tell your wife I loved the shape of her mouth

Author's Note

I know...I used another short poem right in the middle of this one. This is the last page in a ten page chapbok I just finished. yes. it is meant to be strange and mildly offensive. tell me what you think. :)

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

...strange and mildly offensive you say? At least you're not apologizing for it! Fantastic..yeah I read the burst into flames bit and smiled...I liked that so much in the other work and it works so well here.
...the evidence bit was fabulous too!
Greatness as always!

[Ariel B.]

Oh, I like this. I like that you found a nice use for the little "shh. come closer" scrap. "(sprinkle my ashes into an envelope,/ mail me to Jesus' defense attorney)" is so gleefully wicked. I like the glossy veneer of toughness all over, and the way it melts into the sudden vulnerability of "forget that this crooked bird ever flew/ through your cozy little cell."

[OT]

haha i love it! brilliant end - very tongue in cheek - slightly crazy - but perfect end to a little trip I'm sure you'll provide! haha strange and mildly offensive indeed!

[Kerry O'Connor]

I think this is the perfect conclusion to a collection of your poems. It addresses the reader, reminding him that as strange as the poetry seemed, it was all real.

[Amy Bumpas]

Yes, this is strange, but in a good way...only you know how to twist things
up LOL! I really like these lines: (sprinkle my ashes into an envelope,
mail me to Jesus’ defense attorney) #evidence

*tell your wife I loved the shape of her mouth
That is scandalous hehehe!!