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Fluid mane of bent

light streaks truth across a blackened

liar-scape

 

like a master paintbrush

whistles through white winds

mid-fire-dance.

 

Foreign names and numbers wink

from my caller ID.

Phantom punch rocks my

crimson crinkle-face.

 

Blackbirds soar over the corpse of my home,

a candle burns out on a cold church altar,

the new moon mourns herself.

 

I am worm-riddled driftwood bouncing

on invisible wave caps

toward a death who wears rebirth

 

around its leathery neck

like confused Rosary beads.

 

Abacus days slide by

like guillotine blades fall.

 

I hold my swollen head in my hands.

 

All omens & curls tangle

as shadow & shine.

I understand nothing.

Reviews

[Amy Bumpas]

I understand everything, and nothing...love these lines:
Blackbirds soar over the corpse of my home,
a candle burns out on a cold church altar,
the new moon mourns herself.
around its leathery neck
like confused Rosary beads.
All omens & curls tangle
as shadow & shine.
I understand nothing.

Such depth my friend....

[Ruth]

Mind blowing love! The blistered reality, you know, life isn't all roses huh? Why not write it? Perfect work! xx

[ju]

the abacus days and the guillotine blades- counting down - that's brilliant. clean cut and clear- the confusion of Rosary beads- death and re-birth. all interesting. more so together.

[Bertie]

Incredibly tormenting imagery and your use of the macabre works perfectly for themes and journey of the piece.
I enjoyed ! Well done :)

[KAREN]

Great imagery and flow! Love the ending lines.

[shoaib]

very creative piece
great job with it

[Tommy]

Man oh man! This is portrait of understanding in all the confusion; like a glimpse of the bigger picture, all we know for certain is what we can see and relate to…Again I love the use of imagery used to tell this story, like the Rosary around Death’s neck…

I read the comments about punctuation, isn’t that what the breaks are for, kind of the same effect of the comma? That’s how I read a piece broke up like this…It is all style, and I love your flow…

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Kerry O'Connor]

There is an inescapable nihilism in these lines - very depressing.
Your imagery is as on-point as always, and the pace well-matched to the melancholy mood.

[Hayley]

I feel as if all my reviews are the same with your work. I agree though, I think with commas it would make it better and flow better. But, as always, I loveddd it!

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Simply amazing!