blackberry haiku

sweetest blackberries

sleep beneath tall dewy weeds

with poisonous snakes

Author's Note

I've been picking blackberries in my yard. yesterday, I almost got bitten by a coral snake. AAAAAAAaaa!

Reviews

[Mark]

Yeah, I KNOW it's really only about blackberries, but the poet in me wants to find the metaphor! (And after all, isn't growing blackberry vines what a meadow's for?)
What did we learn, kids? May we safely indulge our appetites, and seek satiation in the overgrown arenas, without giving careful heed to all the potentially devastating consequences? (Hmmm..."Seek Satiation": that's a five-syllable line. Maybe I need to compose a Haiku of my own, on this topic!)

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I don't think i would pick any blackberries there again!

[Tim Lion]

The danger only makes them sweeter for me. Good write.

[ju]

i like this. it does everything a haiku is meant to do ( i think :/ ) but is still totally different to any i've read. takes some doing. superb.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Snakes like critters that like Blackberries.
Glad you have poet-like reflexes!

[Bubo]

Wonderful............a delicious fruit so cleverly hidden! Makes you wonder.........

[Ed Hart]

apparently the god likes to save some blackberries for itself

[MuSe Ampoule]

why is it that the sweetest things are guarded by snakes (cough, cough (((knowledge and apples))) cough, cough). Nice Haiku...does this mean you have a new multicolored belt to go along with your blackberry pie?

[Kerry O'Connor]

Ah... the serendipidous moment when snakes get to bite back.

[Robin]

I have a saying - when you forget about snakes, that is when they show up ..