pretty loss (or) an ugly psalm

put your dirty finger

                       in my glorious flaw

          and

            <<<>>>

 

hurt me by accident

 //////////////                  (cracked handshake

  hide that filth! hurry!///                             /or

 ////////////                                 awkward sexual tampering?)

 

feel my human imperfection

squirm like a sunburned earthworm

in your stony palm

 

o my mystic hole (((0)))

echoed from swampy bottoms

(or some other strange internal region  

I’ve never seen in person)

 

because,

loss is always easier to

    shoulder

when a fellow loser 

       supports

the weight of the other end of the

              new black coffin

(or whitish hand-me-down cradle)

 

(oh Lord! Lord. Lord?) 

tattooed faces of the smiling dead

clutter the Cellophane epidermis  

of my feral soul

 

clearly,

I’m

      S T A I N E D

 

what fixes something made

broken?

 

amen

Reviews

[ju]

love the muddled, confused and angry tone of this. and that anger- wow- never lets up. "loss is always easier......new black coffin (or whitish hand-me-down cradle)" makes for the most coherant part of this write. it's a turning point too- before: the voice is taunting, coaxing, daring- looking for a fight. after: it's stating the facts, and asking for answers. i feel it puts a spin on the final question too. it's an interesting poem, to say the least- and full of pain, frustration. brilliant (just in case you're wondering)

[.......]

My Goodness I love the fire out of this one. Such depth in this write.

[freelancejouster]

ok. let me state blatantly and beforehand that i often loath dirty pretty poetry. unicorns die in the making of it, and usually i would have the unicorn. here is not as much of that case, though... some of your descriptions were a little crass for my taste (the way i took them anyway, hahhah) but i did quite like this anyway. everything you touch has such power. like Midas, but with words.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Read it five times to grasp the sense of the prose, well done though, written perfectly with striking imagery.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a work of art~ the nuances displayed as well as the subtleties in underpress of presentation are wild and enigmatic and overall wondrous in their gutter glory~

[Robin]

damn ... just broke a string ...

[MuSe Ampoule]

First, the play with type just brings this to the next level. It made it refreshingly interesting to read and allowed us to peek into the mind of the creator. The strike through of "Hide that filth hurry" yeah, definitely works so well!

Second, the flow, language and thoughts in this work are smashing! Loved the entire thing thoroughly! One of my new favorites! :D

[Kerry O'Connor]

This is a terrifyingly brilliant piece of experimental poetry.