pros and cons

 

pros and cons

 

your lips look like melted red Crayons            your pants fit like sunrise

  your laughter smells of oiled gears              your eyes are hazel poetry

    your new face is on backwards                   your even prettier flipside

      your watch can’t spell AM                your voice has eaten me whole

                       your

                       soul

                      blooms

                   year ‘round

                                  

                            I

                          will

                      negotiate

                                                                 the

                          thorns       

Reviews

[OT]

I actually quite struggled with the layout of this one lol the block bit - my eyes kept darting back - had to cover the left hand side and read it like that lol interesting form to say the least - the list - I love the last bit "I will negotiate the thorns" - the price almost - how many "pricks" can u take lol! nice

[emona]

thats was beautiful

[Kerry O'Connor]

Ooh... Love the innovative layout - really out the box.

And a man willing to negotiate the thorns is worth his salt in my book.

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

I like the playful manner of this form. The back and forth between the two with that final little line. They say "You like someone for their good points but you love them for their bad" but as this asks, where's the line drawn?

[Ed Hart]

where are the 'cons'

[Amy Bumpas]

Interesting way to write a poem:). These are the lines I like: your lips look like melted red Crayons
your new face is on backwards
your pants fit like sunrise
your eyes are hazel poetry
your even prettier flipside
your voice has eaten me whole(love that line)!
Nice job here!

[Moflo]

Definitely very impressed with the format of this, specifically the word "thorns," and the side you chose to put it on. As always, love your wordplay. Great job.

[ju]

gonna have to fave it. superb.