broken down

broken down

 

wanted to smile for you,

           

but my antique face wouldn’t start.

 

had to walk the rest of the way

                      to  Happiness.

Reviews

[emona]

i like that this one a lot its short and sweet but is able to have so much emotion flow from it amazing ^^

[KAREN]

Love it! Words cannot be said, that's how much I love this piece of work you have written so well!! BRAVO!!!100/100

[Amy Bumpas]

I really love this line: but my antique face wouldn’t start
Old, withered, but still happiness is within.

[.]

LOL..I don't suppose I was supposed to laugh..but was compelled too..

[Ed Hart]

that's better than crawling, at least you get to engage the view...simple, straightforward, succinct

[Kerry O'Connor]

Oooof! I felt that... so painfully.

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

Short and simple yet so much meaning packed into a few words,
Great write :)
Jenny x

[Vanessa Rico]

Simple, yet beautiful!

[Hayley]

I think of an old car just too old to start again. Short and to the point, but yet it shows your talent! Keep trudging on...

[Nobody's Daughter]

This is really good. It has a nice flow to it. I like it.