Cancelled Date

A picnic on the beach would have been lovely,

but, since the moon committed suicide last week,

there has been yellow crime scene tape

stretched around the entire ocean.

Reviews

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

This is rather immense.. so strong for such a short paragraph. great write :)

[Moflo]

Amazing. I love your imagination, such a strong sentence that doubles as a poem. Caution tape around the ocean for the moon's suicide, Brilliant!

[Jennifer Lenhardt]

my all time favorite couple - the moon and the sea! please tell me the moon didn't really commit suicide - but what an image - heartbreaking.

[Robin]

great ... my one day off ...

[ju]

very cool. like your style.

[Emily B]

high impact is exactly how I would describe it, these words should have their own genre

[OT]

LOL ha oh dear quite the impact - the moon committing suicide and leaving it's leaky residue over the water - that glimmering sheen is but moonshards - a minimalist scene intensified and reworked by your descriptions!! nice!

[Amy Bumpas]

I love this, and your word usage to describe something is
so unique and different.

[M Baker]

I love it. The image of something wonderful being completely destroyed by an overly harsh reaction.

[Deactivated_BurningDemo..]

The images exploded in my head. Amazing poem.