Legacy

Legacy

 

World in your hand
Wilted and charred

Oceans of tears

Deserts of scars

 

Beautiful dreams

Poisoned with lies

Laughter and love

Threaten to die

 

Singular life

Sliced; divided

Everyone bleeds

Blade’s two sided

 

Fuse ignited

Clock in the red

No turning back

Steep drop ahead

 

Grab all you can

Kill and devour

Dead never rise

Treasures turn sour

 

Gold can’t be saved

All days find ends

Souls move along

Darkness descends

 

Lifetimes are judged

Deeds remembered

Memories stained

Blood, lies, cinders

 

All that remains

Is what you pass

World in your hand

Broken and smashed

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

If words could stop wars this would do it.

Appropriately, there is no hard shiny surreal images to decipher making it plain to Joe Shmoe reader who doesn't get the heavy stuff. Things like this are better left plain and sharp as this work is, to slice through the ignorance. That this is so far removed from your usual I read it as you shouting to the simpletons: See...it's not hard to understand, it is what it is...and this is what you're doing.

Maybe I'm getting more out of this than I should...but I do tend to fall hard into your pieces...

[Stef Outsiders]

WoW... and WOW! ...

[OT]

ah you rhyme so well - the message so powerful in this one - resonating through the mind ha - you've mastered so many different styles - this one is powerful in its difference to your normal stuff - gives it that kick - makes the message stronger as Muse said - in your face - message over words!! nice!

[Amy Bumpas]

Yes, world in our hands and we let it pass on by,
destroyed by our very own. You are so vesitile
in your poems and writings.

[FireWoman]

This speaks to me as clearly as the world news lately. When will it be enough? Our world is dying in a stuttered beat of war. A very relevant poetic.

[Maurice]

Dark. Very well written.

[freelancejouster]

the hard rhymes and powerful wording of this simple yet complex piece pulled me in and made me want to stay in the cruel world you created, here, so effortlessly. i would parch and wither and die within moments, though, i'm certain.

[Moflo]

This was very well written, simple structure with perfect rhymes and perfect pacing. It posed a deep description of life that was very profound and cutting. Good write.

[Cocoacandy]

wow... it actually seemed like it was professionally written... really good work... the only thing that doesnt flow quite as well would be the last line of the second to last stanza. otherwise i love it!
*cocoabean*

[Mark]

Muse said it well: "plain and sharp...to slice through the ignorance."
Oddly, I didn't see this as a rant against greedy warmongering nations, but as the elegy of a single relationship, as it passes through it's several stages: timidity, lust, ennui, destruction. The repeated line "world in your hand" is, I think, what so strongly suggested that to me. A most engaging write, Bob.