Love Poem

A Love Poem

I was standing on a rat-filled dumpster preaching to a group of orthodox cat burglars about the dire need for honesty in government. From the other side of the kitchen, you laughed and said something about a Spanish horse doing double back flips with a hoof-grab on the backside. Sometimes it feels like we’re speaking in different hues. Red and blue make confusion. Then, as I am about to lose faith in your ability to love, one of the burglars asks me if I would burn for my beliefs, and I get a wonderful idea. You and I should have a date night. We’ll set the forest on fire and drink cheap strawberry wine while God decides if he’s going to let us keep our apartment. Then, we’ll make love on that giant beige satellite dish out in front of your mother’s trailer park. When the light hits the metal just right, your n*****s look like Paris in the Springtime.  

Author's Note

This is for a lit magazine editor who told me that all love poems are the same old silly ciches over and over. I told him that nothing about which poetry can be written has to be boring and cliche. After reading this, he said I was right, and said I should see a therapist. True story! :)~

Reviews

[Kerry O'Connor]

You and I should have a date night. We’ll set the forest on fire and drink cheap strawberry wine while God decides if he’s going to let us keep our apartment...

These are, to me, the definitive lines of the entire poem... maybe because they capture the essential rawness of what brings lovers together...

[Thea Fuentebella]

oh this was a good love poem. i do believe love poems all lead to more love or less love or hate or whatever. it''s all the same. this one's genuinely good and different! :)

[Robin]

paris is cold this time of year ...

[Stef Outsiders]

I love that last line when the light hits the metal just right, your n*****s look like paris in the springtime... very clever imaginative! I love it! well done...

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

You would be one hell of a therapist! lol
It was certainly very far from cliche and usual as that twisted view on the sad reality of life warped the usual friendly remarks into well.. that.

[Libby]

Wonderfully abstact. c:

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

hahah srsly. this is the best response to the tripe smarmy people will throw at you in the interest of sounding intelligent.

you know how hard this made me smile?