Screams

I

Screams burst like automatic gunshots from the sickly grey forest.

II

I wonder if you’re bleeding, but I don’t have time to come and look. The walls are threatening to dissolve if I can’t turn lies into gold fast. Your half-naked alchemist savior has been crucified by bong hits and day-time TV again. Stupidity gnaws at his corpse like a starved rat. The pain reminds me of a midnight toothache. That wise old b*****d who sleeps by the trash cans and drinks cheap wine from brown paper bags says that my depression is like setting myself on fire to keep warm. But, you said I was just tired.

III

Oh s**t. I can’t hear you screaming anymore. Am I dead, or are you?   

Reviews

[Moflo]

"Crucified by bong hits and day-time TV again," Such a great way to put it! I thought this was really good, the confusion and depression run hand in hand throughout, and suddenly facts make no sense, and we end up in a dream like world which you have painted. This was very good. Excellent descriptions.

[FireWoman]

The ending is a good slap to the face shock, I like it.

[Deactivated_BurningDemo..]

"Stupidity gnaws at his corpse like a starved rat. The pain reminds me of a midnight toothache." My favorite lines. This is a work of art.

[Thea Fuentebella]

ooh nice. you really describe things differently here. small matters explained in such vibrant and humorous (and peculiar) ways. you're truly an amazing writer.
i demand you write more and i'll keep reading. haha
peace!
thanks for sharing

[Apathy To Empathy]

Too cool!!
Loved every line down to the end

[Amy Bumpas]

I love this line: The pain reminds me of a midnight toothache
I get a cold, lost feeling when reading this.

[Nothing Personal]

A provocative journey..Like watching the end of a 1970's genre breaking horror..Someone's definitely gone crazy amidst all the confusion, passion and love..Someone has become masochistic and inflicts pain on himself to feel comfort..And it may have gone to the level of no return.. a grizzly shocking tale for the listener, a very intense, narration by the narrator and people like me who reads feels sorry for the narrator's pain and feels good for the creator's(your) success. Splendid work !! Less did more

[Maurice]

This was much shorter than your usual writing but very intense.

[Robin]

this was like walking through a house of mirrors , intense writing ...

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

Another piece displaying the dark truth of this ridiculous existance we 'live' in. Reality in all it's dark, shallow and foolish facts.