Treasure

Treasure

 

I

As I lick sweet frosting from your poetry flame, I wonder about your

bellybutton. Tiny crater filled with rain water and dream-stuff beckons.

If ever God had outdone red roses on a cloudy day, it was when he formed

your soul. I need to speak to the other you; the feral one with the recurrent explosions in her eyes. The tigress stripes that tremble beneath a tender

calloused hand.

 

II

There is a runaway with honey wheat trestles spilled

around her ceramic mask. She’s trying to sing your song, but the

spires of my gothic cathedral have undone the elaborate hoax.

 

III

Treasure can only be identified from behind a childish stare.

Behind these blue jalousie windows there is a little boy hopping

in place, and pointing at your laughter.

His decoder ring never fails.

Reviews

[Kerry O'Connor]

Well, the first line had me laughing out loud... only you could come up with that kind of anti-climactic non sequitur! And then the rain water... so beautiful really. Oh.. I just love it all, especially the little boy hopping with laughter. This has made my day.

[Mark]

Sorry, Bob, not sure I got your message here. You may want to change "trestles" in the second stanza to "tresses", if you're referring to her hair.Also, your reference to the "tiny crater" reminded me of my poem, "The Supplicant". You may want to give that a look.

[KAREN]

Great imagery! bravo, another fun filled read!
100/100

[freelancejouster]

this twists down the page, absurdly and purposefully sending it's maryiad messages... it's beautiful, captivating, all things i strive for. "i need to speak to the other you; the feral one with the recurrent explosions in her eyes." this line, there is something so gorgeous about this line...

and the last makes me laugh :)

[MuSe Ampoule]

This one definitely speaks to the nature of men in a beautiful and amusing way. You juxtapose images brilliantly and leave us both laughing and wanting more. Loved it.

[Cocoacandy]

lol... i like it! good work sk, keep it up!!!
*cocoabean*

[Amy Bumpas]

This starts out sensual, then through the last it seems playful,
whimsical. One could only wonder who else watches out the window.

[Maurice]

This was a welcome returning piece for me after a month's absence. Your writing never ceases to amaze.

[OT]

ah I love it! I agree - the first line, I Was like ok then... interesting! lol absolutely mental haha! It just all flows so well - the "blue jalousie windows" - seriously, only you think of these - and then the little boy hopping up and down - a smidgeon of innocence, though the suggestions of codes and masks suggests all may not be as it seems!! hoaxes indeed - you trickster you! I'll go and wonder some more!! nice, nice, nice!!

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

This is great =D Such a sense of fun about it, with those beautiful contrasts in feelings and images. Overall a strong message, with a light feel about it.

[Robin]

that was cool ~