knocked out (blackened eyewitness account)

knocked out

(blackened eyewitness account)

 

a vicious sneer

 

meaty meteor crashes down

percussive explosion

planet wobbles on its axis

knees buckle, straighten, fail

sound of a pencil cracking

angry world blurs

fades

something slimy swims in my belly

the eye-watering smell of ammonia

thinly laced with a whispered scent of chocolate

sunny warmth trickles my chin

falling tastes like copper wire

night curtain falls with me

I  hear

laughter from deep

in the cold black forest

 

feel gritty stone pressed

to my cheek

 

I forgot to unplug the coffee pot

something somewhere is burning down

 

I feel my head lift

and

drop

 

but all senses have failed

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

this is incredible. it's almost as if you've spit the words onto the page to rid yourself of them...

[Kerry O'Connor]

The sub-title of this poem really made me laugh...
What can I say except: You tell it like it is without missing a beat!

[Robin]

yeah , not the stars and tweety birds spinning around the head like the cartoons used to make us think ...