hole (a love poem)

a love poem

hole

 

so far away

hate your new job

miss you

like faith misses reason 

 

vanilla and peppermint ghosts haunt me

milk ripples bewitch my lonesome eyes

taste of honey pierces my soul

church bell chimes shatter in my mind

time is an angry dog at my throat

 

I’ve spent whole days at the airport

cursing departing flights

hopeful you’ll show up on an arrival

stroll nonchalantly up and hug me

give your bag to carry to the car

 

but you won’t

and I’m afraid to fly

 

need a new plan

 

I’ll dig a big hole

 

until stone becomes dirt

                                      becomes mud

                  becomes water

                                    becomes steam

                                                     becomes magma

                                     becomes steam

                  becomes water

                                      becomes mud

                     becomes dirt

becomes stone

                     becomes you

 

I’ll never let you go

again

 

Reviews

[Kerry O'Connor]

This made my heart sing, just to read such crazy a*s devotion.
The structure does wonders for the whole idea - the speaker begins rather analytically - naming and assessing the problem - the anxiety builds as he hangs out at the airport, contemplating his own fears, then breaks out into the feverish 'plan' to win her back...
... and never let her go again. Love the ending.

[Misty Blue Eyes]

wow i love how this flows..

[KAREN]

Truely amazing wonderful beautiful write!

[Hollow Man]

Such is love, drives a real man into the depths of the earth, dirty, hollowed and crazed, even if it's just the memory and the dream of what could have been. Love the structure, very effective. the images created here are honest and brutal. How should one write, here's an example.

KGS

[Maurice]

A very moving love poem, brilliantly constructed.

[J.M]

To love so deeply that you would emotionally pass through the world for someone has to be a beautiful thing, even if agonising. 'becomes dirt
becomes stone
becomes you

I’ll never let you go
again' ---> beautiful words. You are a true poet.

[MuSe Ampoule]

You tantalize every sense here and drag the reader through the emotion motions with you. brilliant piece of movement and feeling. I loved it to pieces!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

plate tectonics of the heart~ what a surge~ what a rhythmic devotion recreating substance itself~ I feel like a unabashed voyeur witnessing magik in motion~