(switch lanes)

hungry enough

to be eaten,

peachy pain howls

icy bruises

through spotless

salmon lips

 

egg-eyed angst roars

a longhaired

pock marked soul hymn

from a crew cut

baby faced

cadaver

 

remnants of remnants

 

self-masticated crumbs

of a purer contamination

 

a former mediocre

with less scars and whispers

 

have you found it yet?

 

that dusty existence

where golden grins don’t taunt

from treacherous jungles

of neon reality

 

instead,

 you exhume stale chuckles

from the time-caked Nike box

stashed next to the jeans

that don’t fit anymore,

but might fit again

 some brilliant diet

 

can you feel the night wolf

withering to a dust bunny

beneath your ribs?

 

can you see

the end 

from here?

 

(switch lanes) 

Reviews

[MOON]

Poignant lovely write like the humour switch lanes.Remnants of remnants , a former mediocre . I might have to quote the whole poem such an inspired almost cynical write that dusty existence
where golden grins don’t taunt
from treacherous jungles
of neon reality

[eatmills]

Quick now, switch lanes.

[patricia]

This was excellent. Had a touch of Seline about it.

[Ken Simm.]

I think the word is incredible. How do you go through a life with such succinct beauty.

[Ruth]

Damn! Five words...
How do you do it?
lol
♥

[Larry Dyson]

yes ,I am afraid it is so much closer than when I was 21.everything does refocus in new ways every day ,doesn't it?Laury
ps..love thsi.."

can you feel the night wolf

withering to a dust bunny

beneath your ribs?"
da** good tongue -in-cheek Bob.

[eglantine]

um wow, this is going in my favorites :) no suggestions. just wow. well, maybe i'd take out the last line. i love ending on that question. "through spotless / salmon lips" ... jealous lol

[roarke]

Leaps and bounds. You have to run to catch up to this piece. A picture album of passages. Life passages. Youth to age.... switching lanes, switching perspectives. As always, painting more than the words say.... nice, very nice stuff.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

A very interesting and unique imagery you have here with your details and descriptions. Nice one.

[Emily B]

oh, wow!