In Gold

In Gold

by alice oiseau

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Wrap me in gold.

 

And take me to the stars

where I'll walk one step after the other.

To infinity.

 

Hold me close.

So close so I can hear your Cimmerian heart undulate

against my breasts.

So close so I can see your lovingly deceptive eyes,

those that shatter my stone heart.

So close so I can touch your deepest desires,

written along my navel tonight.

 

And then

Steal my heart.

 

You sly silver-tongued man

Lay me down in black rosary, freshly fed from the drops of Lethe.

To oblivion.

 

Kiss me hard.

So hard so I can feel your snake tongue slither

down my throat.

So hard so I can taste your lips and the poison,

still wet and lingering on them.

So hard so I can leave your kiss and this world behind.

Fall. Dry. Decay.

 

And wrap me in gold.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

You be the judge.

Reviews

[Honeypot]

Wow! You are the poetry queen. You'll have to tell me about any metaphors that I've missed, but this is really fantastic, Alice. Its got such sensual and yes, erotic tones flowing through it that my heart was pounding as I read it. Then the final stanza completely blew me away. You've just got to tell me if there's hidden meaning. Ha! I'm not evening trying this time - just give me the goods. I love this! I think its my favorite of yours.

[-Insertnamehere-]

Damn this was wonderful. Damn. There is so much meaning in this. It's deep and erotic and sensual and so descriptive. Your poetry is so descriptive. You lead me on a path of images, Alice. You lead me on a path of stories and words and always leave me satisfied, yet always a little bit unsatisfied, because I'm always left wanting more. Great job(:

[bluessadmood]

This was so wonderful..
Wrap in gold and take me to the stars so I walk on them one by one till I reach no end
Hold me close ,so close ,your heart on my breasts,close so I see the loving deceptive eyes
they shatter my heart,close so I touch your deepest desires..written on me tonight
and again steal my heart ,kiss me hard that I feel your tongue and taste those lips
taste the poison still so wet on them..so hard that I leave your kiss and my world with it
So please wrap me in gold..
that was so great ,and yes I stumbled on some blocks ,that I think I missed some here
lovely write..

[purple]

This is beautiful,Alice,paints a beautiful picture in mind-and the metaphors were wow!have fun in france and come back with many cool ideas

[Jibey]

I enjoyed this chilling but stirring read... You used the classical allusions well to underpin the imagery and I liked the idea of the black rosary as this serpent like charmer got his way. There was a shiver of pleasure through it all - eyes wide open!

[Gheeneil]

Soar high where the heart knows no limit but to love and be loved in turn. Gold is after all malleable and its longevity can keep up with time. Obsession could be a threat though. Anyway, I like the feel of it. It has a different touch. Maybe because it's bold and blunt. So creative and well-crafted.

[Big ol' Kahuna]

I think this was a beautiful poem. I may be way out there and off, but it was a poem of extremes. Almost like Heaven and Hell. To me it was in the begining the dream of how the relationship was made up to be, heavenly and full of love, and then as if the dream cracked, or the belief that it could come true that way was broken, the desire overcame, and gave into lust, even at great cost. But I liked the way it finished, coming full circle, wrapping in gold. Kind of like an addiciton, the beggining of the poem being your desire for the way this love should go, the second half being a sort of desperation for that addiction. Kind of like be with me like this, or be with me like that; just be with me. Or it can all be in my head, installed there by the depth of your talented words, and the images planted by them.

Nice job.

[Irwin]

a bitter-sweet, addictive embrace Alice, filled with evocative images. Like this very much.

[nora]

jeez, this is really really great! its sort of like, kissy-kissy, but its still cool :)
'And take me to the stars
where I'll walk one step after the other.
To infinity.'
that part is so pretty. it reminds me of like, fairies or angels walking in the sky or something. or like shooting stars! okay, im waay off now, lol.
anywaay, its a really pretty poem, alice :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You really have a beautifully way of expressing emotions... the deep romantic feel of this piece is heart pounding yet the underline darkness makes it strangely sexy.

[Legion]

Wonderfully divine. Love the weaving of this. The golden fibers that you piece together to form this lovely feast for the eyes is incredibly. Love it. Love it. Love it.