Lives

Some people pour there life into wealth
Some pour it all into fame
Some try to prolong it with good health
Some go out with a flame
Some people pour their life into work
Some pour it all into beauty
Some live their whole life as a jerk
Some live their life rather loony
Some people pour their life to religion
Some pour it all into revelry
Some leave no trace, not a smidgen
Some leave a large legacy
Some people live their life to the end
Some peoples end all to early
Some peoples lives are broken and bent
Some are twisted and curly
Each person leads quit different lives
One thing we have in common
Is that we’re struggling just to survive

Author's Note

Hope you like it!

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This has fun wit to it, and the message rings truth. There are some very juicy lines at the end, which enhance the quality of the poem. The only places where this falls flat is at the end (you're missing a line there, and the musicality doesn't flow too well because of it), and the "smidgen" - "legacy" lines, which are missing a couple of syllables for the musicality to carry over better. This is otherwise very nicely done! Couldn't help but chuckle through this one!

[Sam]

Thank you, Glad you enjoyed it!

[ImSJ]

Nice work, Sam. Of all I've read from you this gives me the feeling that you have taken some time to polish it up before delivering the final product.

[Sam]

Yes I went over this one sooooo many time before writing it here. Thanks for the review!