Be careful when you speak

The words came flowing out
Did I really just say that?
No it was in my head... I doubt,
But, by the look on her face,
What I had said was quite real.

Not hidden in thoughts
Out-loud I had spoken my fill.
What I wanted to say I had said,
But was that really all for the best?
Making her feel like to me she was dead,

That she was nothing more then a pest.
I started to rebuff what I had already said,
But, for a second my voice hung in air.
Should I lie, covering up all my thoughts?
Should I patch what I already started to tear?

My answer was "yes", fix what I broke,
No right did I have in tearing her down.
What I thought became less important.
She was a person, not dirt on a mound.
No reason could I find to debase her
Her life was not made just for me.

I had hurt her, and left her quite sore
I realized, “what I said wasn’t worth it.
So whenever I speak without regard,
The best thing for me to do is just quit
And keep us both from getting scarred”.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Interesting rhyme scheme.....compelling narrative and wise message. Nicely done! Much enjoyed.

[Sam]

Thanks you for your review!

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Eva CattyG]

Beautiful poem, which to be honest i really enjoyed...
I would agree with ImSJ about last stanza, but how idea was presented in general was very good.

[Sam]

Thank you!

[ImSJ]

I think that this is among your best so far Sam. The last stanza was quite awkward though and if I have any suggestion it would be, in a poem like this, to write more as if you were speaking this. You know, naturally. After the first stanza I also expected some sort of rhyme scheme which didn't materialize. But otherwise, well done!

[Sam]

Thanks for the review! I had a lot of trouble with the last stanza. I thought about cutting it out completely, but then it made the poem’s ending to abrupt. I had no idea what to do with it, so thanks for your advice. It was definitely helpful!