Demons and bones

Sometimes everything you touch cracks at its seams. And the mountains that you're climbing crumble beneath. Everything shatters as you fall, and once you've hit the bottom there's only broken glass. All those people you tried to save, in the end, just wouldn't last. That is when you realize that you really are alone, and the only things that are there for you are your demons and your bones.

Author's Note

Is the grammar and punctuation correct?

Reviews

[Isemay]

If you're asking about grammar, "every thing" could/should be turned into "everything" in both instances, "your climbing" should be "you're climbing". You will need to choose either "That's" or "That is". And the first half of that last sentence is strangely constructed, I'm not sure the meaning is clear. I would suggest rereading it and possibly yanking "the only thing" to make it clearer, if I have understood what you mean to say correctly.

Otherwise, I like it!

[Sam]

Thank you for your advice, it was really helpful!

[Bacchus]

Makes me think of the abominations that causes desolation... Who we pretend to be might just be our end