I have just begun to bloom

A seed under the ground

 With chilly winter outside

 No sun for warmth 

Or for dazzling it's life,

 Long long nights

 with the haules of the wind outside...

 A golden light suddenly appeared ,

Bringing warmth and freedom,

 And a drop of water 

 To give her life

 Slowly and slowly,

she rose above the ground 

To meet the sun

 and the morning breeze

 It was those long  beautiful days of spring...

She grew up

 And a bud apeared

 sweet and delicate, and I,

Have just begun to bloom ...

Reviews

[¿]

How rough and tough a seed or we like seed go through in life...A golden light or ray... like ray of hope appears and heals the crust of cold sad past....this is something which if read feels like gathering guts...thanks for sharing☺

[ZDMusgrove]

I find the wording of the poem to be excellent, yet it is dimmed by the misuse of punctuation. If you fixed the punctuation, I am sure your poem would definitely bloom like the image it paints.

[Senu Jayasinghe]

Thank you for your comment. This is kindof about the change of life after finding your true love. This is how I feel about love. But when it is in words it is not as vivid as it was in my head.

[ZDMusgrove]

Words never truly capture what is in our heads does it? It may come close, but never close enough. It's damn good fun to try though. So keep up the work.