Whispering Dream

Small water droplets hanging in the air, embracing hills at twilight.

Swaying shadows of roses coloured white.

Feeling the coldness of your heart as you hold me tight.

Evergreens silhouetted on a full moon night.

Stars lighting up the heavens with different colours creating a symphony of delight.

Your freezing hands caressing my skin as I slowly become paralyzed.

Hearing whispers around me trying to understand it in my mind.

The sounds of birds suddenly awakening me from slumber to a life full of spite.

*Ş.Ü*

Reviews

[Twilight]

Firstly, I concur with what Arundass has said about this one. I would have reviewed it sooner, but did not notice in my "news feed"; that you had added another.

Curiously, the male lover in this piece is cold hearted. And yet, you still seem to allow him; to take you in passion.

On the otherhand, you admit to being paralysed towards the end; at the sensation of his "freezing hands". It happens slowly, as you secretly want it to.?

But, you also seem potentially vexed and doubtful; with your hearing of those "whispers". Your conscience or feminine instinct, advising caution perhaps?

Of course, only the writer knows for sure. And, it's taken from dreamy inspirational feelings.?

At the very end, those chirping birds seem to awaken you to the reality; of a new morning ahead. Along with, what you regard as "a life full of spite". However, not spiteful living from yourself. More likely, that ingrained spitefulness which seems to pervade around us - in modern societal living..?

Thanks for sharing, Senay.

[Şenay]

She can not see the man's true nature, because he has hidden it very well. Thus are the beautiful surroundings wich are not real.
Yes, as always, your interpretation is outstanding. Thank you for your review, appreciate it.

[Twilight]

Thanks. Ironically sad, that the "beautiful surroundings" here; are only from imagination. Whereas, the man's true nature is only too real. Even so, the woman should in no way be written off as stupid; for falling victim to his allure. Indeed, when they originally became lovers; she could have only known so much about this guy. Particularly, if he had manipulated this woman; told falsehoods or hidden any difficult home truths about himself. Just nature too, that situations can develop; in which a woman becomes trapped by her man. Either trapped emotionally, or down to her circumstances at the time. Potentially, even more complexed for that woman; if she has struggled to escape from any instinctive but irrational (in hindsight) fondness which she may have held for him.? Such is life, sometimes..!

[Şenay]

Yes, you are very right about that.
It is unfortunately the result of manipulation, psychological abuse from a narcissistic spouse/partner.
Thank you.

[berenongur]

this seems like an attempt to romanticize a wrong relationship to me. i get it, we've all tried to tempt fate, haven't we? as halsey says in one of her songs "it's funny how
The warning signs can feel like they're butterflies"
cold hands can't warm you. you shouldn't think of a cold heart as your home, you'll freeze and get sick. no you can't get used to it. no human should ever get used to the cold, if there's any hope of warmth inside them it will kill them. i love the way you write, it's professional and flows so naturally. please tell me you're feeling better!!! or maybe i got this wrong...

Kendine dikkat et!

[Şenay]

Thank you for your kind review.
It is about the woman who can not see the man's true nature, because he has hidden it very well. Thus are the beautiful surroundings wich are not real. The whisperings around her is her instinct warning her from him.
Thank you, I'm feeling better now, although ofcourse healing takes time.

Çok teşekkür ederim, sende kendine dikkat et!

[berenongur]

Why does the woman blame herself? It's not that you didn't see it, he hid it well. don' blame her, you are doing great. take all the time you need, but be gentle to yourself

[Şenay]

Thank you so much, unfortunately a toxic relationship leaves scars in your soul. Time will heal.

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful work. Great word painting.

[Şenay]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, very glad you liked it.

[Betty Hermelee]

Hello Senay
Unfortunately, Your dream seems very cold...not warm and caressing...and that makes you feel frigid. In addition ,you hear whispers around you, yet cannot understand them....thankfully you awaken from your sorrowful dream; into a life of spite of spite, which is not a happy ending... perhaps this is life in reality
Interesting piece
Warmly, B

[Şenay]

Thank you for your kind review. Glad you liked it.
Take care, Ş

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome! Please respond in kind
Warmly, B😊

[Şenay]

Thank you Betty, take care 🙂

[J Todd Underhill]

Fabulous write. A subject most can identify with and so well worded. Well done indeed.

[Şenay]

Thank you so much. Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. Very glad you liked it.

[JessyJacob]

hi senay, maybe i want to share something with you. why people want to judge simple beings, most of them like me are strong enough when the person stands for her. when the person looked so ambiguous, two way one strong and other never spoke, she did everything but couldnt find a clue that he will be taking her home.As a woman you might know guys look for girls with feelings to have them, just for their time being, only one stoods for her talking to her and taking her home. He did one thing of loving her, but the other thing he made her doubtful when he nevr replied back. The way i went back to my husband, is because of my son, no that i need a company or partner to live with. Then when i broke he told he cant be with me and find another, i was totally broke with voilent cry that reached kailasam too the God's place. But few gurus told you have to go back for your son, if i was alone, i would never go back to that man who wasnt ready to accept me knowing my secret affair whihc he saw in my mobile, I only accepted him back because he was father my son. Nothing else, when i loved my man, he was not with me in physical talk.

The reason second time to accept someone, i was ready to marry 20 yrs older man becuase of lonely health defect at that time, i thought i hav to be with someone who will take care of me. When with other trap too, he forced me to accept him, you know very well, when he wants his things he just gets them any way, it was a torture i wanted to kill myself, but he didnt listen pushed me into that man, where i just into that person as part of my burth reason to get things done for this world. but he knows very well how i feel about that person. he is just pretending to hurt me but he knows very well takes my pain as tease.

hope this clarifies to some extent. i thought people knew about me my nature by far now, its been 10 yrs. people know people in just few days. trust is that i never cheat anyone, even if i had done wrong, i accept it, why should i hide, when my mind is open book, as nobody believes even if i say lie, only interpretation is the thing that people are not able to perceive from me though they know what i am doing.

you too mistursted me that i did wrong there was nothing hatred, i tried to fix things from my sode through his ideas as he only guides me in my thoughts.

when we see people from near we know more of them. but there was always a thouhgt he maight not be serious about me to take home as he never spoke to me. because it maynot be mistrust but what he wants may be something different thats why he i snot talking, but on the spot it turned to me that he was just for time being spent with me looking for me. but later when i thought i always make sure to take it positively, everything happens for a good reason, so i idnt end up hating, but i am also normal average human, who feel emotional, boundaries, concerned caring, and these feelings make as a whole of me.

hope you know better me.

thank yofu for having good feel on me as i see your responses below.

if i am wrong i wpuld frankly accpet idont try to be political or diplomat or dishonets, as it loses trust on me as a human where you feel hatred on me.

jessy jacob.
with love.

[Şenay]

I'm sorry for the things you had to go through.
I think no one has the right to judge anyone. Everyone makes mistakes in their life. It is important to learn from our mistakes.It allows us to become better decision makers, it allows us to have more self-awareness and it also encourages a growth mindset.

I was mentally abused by my husband for years and wasn't aware of it untill I read an article about narcisstic personality disorder and I left him.
It was a very difficult time that is left in the past.

With love, take care.

[JessyJacob]

Thank you for your kind reply. Hoping for the things to get better. A very happy new year to you, wishes for you and everyone in family. Nobody takes time to wish and we take whats there is wishes but wishes are blessings only those become true who wish from heart.

Jessy jacob.

[Şenay]

Thank you Jessy for your kind wishes. A very happy year to you and everyone in your family.
Take care.

[JessyJacob]

Thank you so much. You too take care.


With love,
Jessy Jacob.

[Antoñyo]

I took from this, no matter the surrounding beauty, perceived or otherwise, the gist of people we truly want to know finds its way to the surface for eyes (both pair) to see.
Thanks for the share

[Şenay]

Yes, sooner or later we see them for what they truly are.
Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.

[Throwing Romeo]

is romance loves unfulfilled desire? This poetry cries for
warmer genuine truest
kind of love. The kind that
grows, intertwines over
time and becomes solid.
Imagry to rember and
a clear delicate voice.

R.

[Şenay]

Yes, I think we all long for this kind of love, but it is rare to find the genuine truest kind of love. Especially in the period we live in now.

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem, appreciate it.

[Arundass TP]

Beautiful poem. Vivid imagery. Loved it

[Şenay]

Thank you for your review. Glad you liked it.

[Ballpark Frank]

I like this! You are a skilled poet Senay. You say a book load in a few lines.

A gut wrenching situation though. I'm 😞 sorry.

[Şenay]

Thank you for your very kind review. Happy you liked it 🙂
Yes, it was in an other period of life. All is left in the past