Whispering Mind

Emotionless eyes that have the colour of wind, looking in mine...killing me from inside.
Why do I feel so tired all the time?
Seeing everything you do, being blind.

Fearing your unstable mind, destroying mine.
Whispering in my ear: 'Deny'.
The sadness oh the sadness...comes and goes flood tide.

Going insane, stuck in an endless cycle trying to get outside.
Going through my anguished brain, anger and hate taking over leaving sorrow behind.

*Ş.Ü*

Reviews

[Ballpark Frank]

I think you could teach poetry writing. You're very good. Too many aspiring poets take the power of what they're writing away completely by over explaining. Or too many words. I think a good poet like yourself allows her readers the dignity of filling in the blanks themselves.

[Şenay]

Thank you so much, I am flattered. Agree, it has to leave to one's imagination

[Ballpark Frank]

"Emotionless eyes there have the color of the wind "

That's an impressive line.

[Şenay]

Yes, that person has no empathy feelings and it is not clear what he will do next, his eyes are like unstable wind

[J Todd Underhill]

Another astounding write. As one who has fought mental illness my entire life I liked the read. I know I am not alone in my battles. Thank you

[Şenay]

Thank you for reading and viewing my poem.

[berenongur]

I've never felt the talking doubt in my head so vividly. It's like you've given voice to the demons inside my head. Yes, this is absolutely frighteningly successful. Thank you for sharing. dear Şenay... take care!

[Şenay]

Thank you very much for your kind review. Take care!

[Jo Billygoat]

A wanting of washing reprieve to regain sustainability
Wain from the angst of wanting dost my being
Is there no release from the tension of anxiousness

Nature sustains why not a body
Is there no remedy to provide release
Come, I call to thee, please arrive with my ease

Slumber comes, eyes stay wide, heart continues to bleed with sorrow
Alone with my thoughts forever tortuing me
A ring, in the everesence of distant times, chimes a daunting knoll

A toll to pay must one always pay
Living is a price always paid to seek yet never find
Why is the journey mostly traveled in pain and alone?

Answers evade
Pain always given
Comfort never found

These are the ways of a tortured soul
Never relenting are the paths journeyed
Yet yearning dost one for it simply
to end.

[emmajoygreen]

A tragedy in the advanced stage of pain, dear Senay. Your heart's tears have written truth as you feel it, perhaps you've helped self by doing so. Wishing you peace.

[Şenay]

Thank you for your kind words. Wishing you peace 🙂

[Throwing Romeo]

Darker traits never show in reflections
some deflections but no accountability.
Powerfully addressed .
Thank you for sharing,

R.

[Şenay]

Thank you for your review, appreciate it.

[Twilight]

In this one, it seems as if some volatile person has been attacking you emotionally; and your subconscious mind is telling you that. It's obviously someone, with whom an strong emotional bond might exist; but perhaps your rational mind knows that it's been hurting..?

Indeed, in the second verse; it's blatantly clear that you fear the risk of even losing your mind to that "unstable" one".

Following on to verse three, it seems as if you suffer the trauma of sadness and anger; as the unstable mind continues to attack. You're feeling trapped, and overwhelmed. Ultimately though, it's and anger and hate which become your driving emotions. Perhaps, those are the only emotions which the unstable one deserves to have directed his way - from you? Particularly, after the trauma which he has put you through.?

[Şenay]

The victim struggling with the emotional effects of narcissistic abuse.
Thank you for your excellent review, you described it very well.

[Twilight]

Thanks. Like yourself, I know that real life can have a dark side; and some horror films are less far-fetched than the less aware might think. By the way, there's a clique on this site; so don't let that put you off. They have very fixed ideas, about just about everything. Some won't even read any erotica or horror at all, and just sneer at it. Anyway, feel free to send me "read requests". This site has a feature for sending those. Hope that you keep in touch.

[Şenay]

Yes unfortunately Life is full of unexpected dark sides. Thank you for your kind words.

[Twilight]

Add more writing, when you can? Take care.

[Şenay]

Thank you, take care.