Whispering Mind

Emotionless eyes that have the colour of wind, looking in mine...killing me from inside.
Why do I feel so tired all the time?
Seeing everything you do, being blind.

Fearing your unstable mind, destroying mine.
Whispering in my ear: 'Deny'.
The sadness oh the sadness...comes and goes flood tide.

Going insane, stuck in an endless cycle trying to get outside.
Going through my anguished brain, anger and hate taking over leaving sorrow behind.

*Ş.Ü*

Reviews

[Ballpark Frank]

I think you could teach poetry writing. You're very good. Too many aspiring poets take the power of what they're writing away completely by over explaining. Or too many words. I think a good poet like yourself allows her readers the dignity of filling in the blanks themselves.

[Şenay🥀]

Thank you so much, I am flattered. Agree, it has to leave to one's imagination

[Ballpark Frank]

"Emotionless eyes there have the color of the wind "

That's an impressive line.

[Şenay🥀]

Yes, that person has no empathy feelings and it is not clear what he will do next, his eyes are like unstable wind

[Throwing Romeo]

Darker traits never show in reflections
some deflections but no accountability.
Powerfully addressed .
Thank you for sharing,

R.

[Şenay🥀]

Thank you for your review, appreciate it.

[Twilight]

In this one, it seems as if some volatile person has been attacking you emotionally; and your subconscious mind is telling you that. It's obviously someone, with whom an strong emotional bond might exist; but perhaps your rational mind knows that it's been hurting..?

Indeed, in the second verse; it's blatantly clear that you fear the risk of even losing your mind to that "unstable" one".

Following on to verse three, it seems as if you suffer the trauma of sadness and anger; as the unstable mind continues to attack. You're feeling trapped, and overwhelmed. Ultimately though, it's and anger and hate which become your driving emotions. Perhaps, those are the only emotions which the unstable one deserves to have directed his way - from you? Particularly, after the trauma which he has put you through.?

[Şenay🥀]

The victim struggling with the emotional effects of narcissistic abuse.
Thank you for your excellent review, you described it very well.

[Twilight]

Thanks. Like yourself, I know that real life can have a dark side; and some horror films are less far-fetched than the less aware might think. By the way, there's a clique on this site; so don't let that put you off. They have very fixed ideas, about just about everything. Some won't even read any erotica or horror at all, and just sneer at it. Anyway, feel free to send me "read requests". This site has a feature for sending those. Hope that you keep in touch.

[Şenay🥀]

Yes unfortunately Life is full of unexpected dark sides. Thank you for your kind words.