Whispering Fate

Sacrified everything she had, yet it remained the same.
Ceased expecting anything, indifferent she became.

Ceased expressing preferences, feeling it is pointless.
Silence born from exhaustion and hopelesness.

Unaware of what was evil.
His tainted soul being deceitful.

Destroying everything alive, planting seeds of grief.
As she became someone she barely recognizes, a reflection of his needs.

Never ending feeling of emptiness.
Fate whispering to loneliness.

Dreams abandoned, laughter, flowers fade.
Remembering who she is, knowing she will never be the same.

Detachment turning into contempt.
Finally allowing her to recognize his true scent.

*Ş.Ü*

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Emotional abuse is not cool. It's good that you articulate it like this. Too often we don't articulate this and it eventually comes out in emotionally abusive ways down the line. The cycle continues when we don't describe the issues. It's highly tragic. I'm glad to see you are avoiding the tragedy.

[Şenay]

Thank you, it was a very difficult time that is now left in the past.
Thank you for reading and your review, appreciate it.

[Beren]

wow this is really scary powerful. i felt every part of it. i think it's a traumatic thing that nobody talks about enough when people you trust and have relationships with suddenly have their "true scents" revealed. i think misrepresenting yourself or manipulating is cheating. because you look back and say "that's not the person i loved!" and you meet someone new all over again and you feel the pain as if it were from a stranger. this time without your companion. This is so touching, unfortunately. Definitely one of my favorites in cafe, I was inspired. I'm sorry you're going through this, but know that it's universal and don't feel alone. Unfortunately, there's a broken heart everywhere in the world.

umarım şuan daha iyisinizdir! kendinize dikkat edin!

[Şenay]

Thank you so much dear Beren.
Yes, I agree.
With this kind of relationships you learn lessons as well and to recognize people for who they are when you meet them.

Teşekkür ederim, daha iyim. Ruhsal yaralarımın tamamen iyileşmesi de zamanla olucak inşallah.
Kendine iyi bak.

[Kim S.]

I can feel a relationship ending here, such an emotional read, very well written.

[Şenay]

Thank you so much.

[Twilight]

Very sad, and well expressed. Clearly, it portrays a woman who has given her all, to a relationship; only to be totally betrayed by her partner's evil and deceitful behaviour.

In this scenario, it captures that darkest state of despair; and the man's initial tantalising scent is eventually recognised as being a red herring. His real scent, is the one remembered at the very end.

Whilst the physical relationship end point, can be measured fairly clearly, this poem shows some of the lasting emotional scars; which a betrayed woman can be left with. Indeed, upon self-reflection; this poor woman struggles to see her true self. And, realises the extent to which that relationship; had revolved around her lover's needs...

[Şenay]

Excellent review! Perfect description of what I wanted to people see in my poem.
Thank you so much, as before you are on point.

[Ballpark Frank]

This is an excellent, gradual description of a painful mess of a serious relationship. I'm sure you felt things would go much differently and it probably was good for a while. But colors tend to blend through and often bailing water doesn't prevent the sinking. How sad.

[Şenay]

Thank you so much, appreciate it.
'But colors tend to blend through and often bailing water doesn't prevent the sinking'..You described it perfect with beautiful words.

[Ballpark Frank]

Really? I was guessing. Lol

I'm glad you're still a kind, thoughtful person after such an ordeal.

[Şenay]

Lol...thank you. Yes I'm grateful for surviving and staying strong.