Whispering Rain

Whispering Rain

A Poem by Şenay🥀

Sitting by the black window staring outside, watching people go by.
Looking at the birds flying free and careless in the clouded sky.

Rain falling slowly, hitting the window with a whispering sound and I ask myself: 'Why?'
Like the raindrops falling slowly from the sky, teardrops start falling slowly from my eyes.

All those years lost as I was running to catch up with time, carrying my bleeding heart as I again tried.

Frustration, anger, sadness running through my veins as the last remaining feelings of love, compassion, affection die.

As I turn to see my face in the mirror, sad eyes turning cold as ice.
Numbness in my soul as the rain fades away sky-high...

*Ş.Ü*

© 2024 Şenay🥀


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One wonders, if your emotional pain will pass in time; along with those rain drops and those birds passing in flight?

Of course, rain drops are also sometimes used as a metaphor for falling tears.

In the last paragraph, your eyes turn from sadness to icy "cold"; and your very soul experiences "numbness". So, what might these changes signify? This new state, may mean that you have become oblivious to those recent tears. And, your numbed soul hardened; and perhaps no longer so easy to upset?

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Şenay🥀

3 Weeks Ago

Again excellent description. Yes, the sky crying is used as a metaphor for falling tears. It is the .. read more



Reviews

One wonders, if your emotional pain will pass in time; along with those rain drops and those birds passing in flight?

Of course, rain drops are also sometimes used as a metaphor for falling tears.

In the last paragraph, your eyes turn from sadness to icy "cold"; and your very soul experiences "numbness". So, what might these changes signify? This new state, may mean that you have become oblivious to those recent tears. And, your numbed soul hardened; and perhaps no longer so easy to upset?

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Şenay🥀

3 Weeks Ago

Again excellent description. Yes, the sky crying is used as a metaphor for falling tears. It is the .. read more
Seems so many of us KNOW that window all too well.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Wretchedly sad emotions on your heart's mirror.. a scar that neither quickly or easily fades - in fact, if ever.
Words said, promises made, emotions sewn as if on rags at times but - nonetheless felt as they disolve through every layer and part of one's body. Even numbness hurts as it fights to exist. Your words hurt.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Şenay🥀

3 Weeks Ago

Such wonderful words.
Even numbness hurts as it fights to exist...
Thank you for your .. read more
This is unfortunately a reality for so many of us. We get hardened by pain.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Şenay🥀

4 Weeks Ago

I believe to be able to write true emotion genuinely, you have to have experienced it. Having it on.. read more
Ballpark Frank

3 Weeks Ago

I see a few things here which could make this more powerful. Very slight things though.
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Şenay🥀

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you, appreciate it very much.

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Added on November 23, 2024
Last Updated on November 28, 2024
Tags: life, love, sadness, psychological,  pain,  toxic-love,  depression,  narcissm


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