When your love was not for mine

love when seems fasle from other side,this world turns into hell.

Those winds turned all wild,
when your love was not for mine,
and darkness prevailed,
where even shadows denied to acompany,
and all i could see was my tears,
because there was no one,
to wipe,
to console...

Walking down those miles,
to reach the lane where we met,
i never got tired to wait,
for summer till winter,
from bloomy trees to sheded leaves,
all displayed a hopefull stay,
which finally got all apart,
when your love was not for mine....

My love was not an epic,
to be given a place in sheets,
but rather it was,
gift of several preconceptions,
certain manupulations,
which had no ends,
which had no life,
and once did my nerve erupt,
when you love was not for mine...

Author's Note

Wrote this one after a gap of one month.do give your views.

Reviews

[Leigh]

I like the opening line the best as it tells me how you were feeling straight away. I got a great atmosphere and feeling from this poem, you have described a time, 'When' a place 'Those miles' and in the possesive a person 'Mine' and thats what brings this one home in a very powerful and direct way. I can feel your personal sadness, expressed as part of an every day occurence by millions of people, unfortunately..

[Kuhr Gred]

My love was not an epic, --> this is true... and i just remember from one of my friends advice "True love waits" :) thanks for sharing
- Kuhr gred

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

I love how you say 'your love is not for mine' instead of me, because it shows that tu had love to give, love that you were giving, but it just wasn't right. Excellent work.

[Leslie Philibert]

I`ve not read any work from this writer, and I`m looking forward to reading more.Lots of things I liked, the background of a natural scene bonded to emotions, and lots of good lines like my love was not an epic or nerve erupt. Good write.

[Pax]

wow, such gloomy love. I think you convey your emotions really well in this poem. I love the truthfulness on what the poem say. A well done write. Hope it goes well for you.

[Archia]

"My love was not an epic,/ to be given a place in sheets" Those two lines were really the best of the poem for me. They summed up it all, whilst giving it such a beautiful purely poetic nature. The meaning of this poem is really quite empasised, and the emotions come through. Nice job.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

The last stanza truly hits home... bringing the reader into the demise of the relationship... "My love was not an epic, to be given a place in sheets,"~ I love this line... Nicely done.