SHATTERED CARDS OF LIFE

Millions of dreamy birds feel lost under inside the world's cage. Let them fly:)

My choice to quit,
was not just a choice,
but a war within,
against those,
who were with me,
since i knew,
i had existed.

I never bothered,
for any unknown,
and cherished those moments,
when they all made me rejoice,
but now it hurts,
and that strange feel,
which rendered me poor,
starving for love.

Despite having the power,
I lost my faith,
for my steps were washed away,
before i could look back,
to correct my move,
and try it all again.

My fingers had gaps,
to fill their love,
but it is now torn away,
when snatched with power.

I wanted the silence,
a place to rest over,
away from those pushing games,
when i fail to see hope,
coagulated same pond,
even when i tried my best.

At last I rewind,
that I'm not a loser,
as I wasn't allowed to play,
the way I wanted,
but was guided nowhere.

Its just a peep through,
into those silent world,
where i could gather,
my soul,my peace....

Reviews

[AK]

Brilliant poem! I loved it! It flows very well! Keep writing!

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

Fantastic, enjoyed the poem entirely. With regards.

[Suditi]

Superb write.
Especially love the stanza where you talk about not being a loser..because you were not given a chance to play.. Its so true.. No matter how brave we are, how bold we are, i think at some point each of us has to bend..in front of the circumstances, our loved ones, anything..and it is really sad that, at that time, we dont get to do what our heart would have wished..sometimes, we are guided towards things we dont even want.

Okay in short, amazing poem Selva :)

[I'm Just me:)]

AMAZING

[xeroxcandybar]

Reads very personal and heartfelt but at the same time I cannot help but relate.

[Archia]

I come away from this... well seeing many different stories in this. And that's made me confused. I know that I don't understand the proper meaning of this, and I don't actually think I'm close either. Reading this again, I find that there is a common thing throughout, a meaning that fits in altogether, but a meaning that I think I could only get from it by reading it all and then going back.
What I liked was the short sentences, it made it swift but not snappy.
There's just one grammar thing that needs fixing. Singular i needs to be a capital. I.
So, a bit confusing for me, but a nice style, and I felt there was a depth in this.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Aww. this sounded so sad to me. But such a deep poem. I love this. Life has many hardships.. we are the ones to finish this.. we gotta let it unfold..

Nice poem! I enjoyed the read!

[Draven]

Really deep.

[Cathy Wattam]

Lovely flow and great piece. Should really say "into those silent worlds" however, but that's a minor issue. On the whole, I really enjoyed this thanks.

[Katie Flores]

wow its a pretty meaningful poem, obviously. i enjoyed the fact that the reader could translate this poem to their own problems, not just smoking, but personal issues and how this lends a soothing pat on those scabs.