THREE DAYS IN HELL

This is for the world's most beautiful girl.pls come back..

These three days,
it was hard to sustain,
the truth that you left over,
with a say,
that there was nothing,
nothing between two united soul...

I may be mad,
i may be crazy,
but its not just me in all,
but it is you in me,
which drives me whole,
drifting me into,
those scary future,
where you are away,
away from where,
i can't just even dare...

Hoping that you would return,
clearing those concrete walls,
build by the fear of world,
build by the doubt of soul,
but i promise,
just hold my hands,
imposing yours on mine,
and i can fight with all,
to take you apart,
with a joy of life,
and something more than that..

Pls come.....will you?

Author's Note

Its just a usual poem to relieve myself from my sadness...

Reviews

[Jack Isaac]

Those days away are scary and insecure because you never know what could happen in a moment, and you hope in that moment everything will change for the better. Let's hope she knows that coming back means coming back to that poetry that is you, I'm sure this is the idea you've inspired in this write. Nicely done.

[$êlvån]

tanx 4 ur lovely review

[CHRIS ANDES]

wow! nice write
maybe if she could read this
she'll come back
=]

[just is]

I can feel the emotionis through out this write,
so very nicely written and expressed.

[Tai Ryens]

You express yourself amazingly in this one. Good job.

[Queen Empress]

Well penned :)) keep it up

[Monica]

You expressed your feelings, sadness, and love very well. I hope that she is able to read this, however, you have probably said these things to her...However, I agree with Nautili, if it was meant to be, it will be. That may seem harsh right now, but time does heal and love will find you when the time is right...I promise.

Your poem is well penned, take care...keep writing :)

[Pritesh]

Very well execution of sadness in the line of poem!!keep writting!!

[Amila Jay]

A wonderful write :))

[Ink Angel]

This is wonderful, truly lovely write. Thank you.

[AK]

Awesome poem! I loved the way your emotions were expressed. The first stanza gripped my attention. Keep writing!