SMOKING-PLEASURE/ADDICTION??

Smoking makes one drift toward itself and shows a false pleasure..but later one knows that it was all fake.

It was my choice,
to not to try,
try to smoke,
but i did move,
drifting into those circles,
which made me wanted,
to taste the dew,
to feel the pleasure...

He gave me one,
nicely lit and mended,
kissing its lips,
i sucked it in,
like those my peers did,
filling millions of molecules,
under one roof...

I coughed and exhaled,
starving for air,
for i felt,
i had in the fire,
but something made me to try again,
to repeat what all i did...

Again i kissed,
sucking its sweet aroma,
and i could feel the magic,
filling my lungs,
deep and drowning,
into the sea of nicotin,
i found a pleasure of life...

Two to three,
then three to ten,
i found it sweeter,
from pleasure to need,
and need to addiction,
i was lost,
and limits were crossed...

Now i'm a professional,
in smoking those packets,
but those pleasures are gone,
making me stick to it,
and unable to change,
i carry it further,
with a hope to quit,
but i know,
i had a choice,
choice not to try,
and a choice to live by...

Author's Note

Just tried this one.i haven't smoked yet and hopefull i won't try.just enjoyed writing this one..do give your critique reviews:)

Reviews

[Priya]

I think this poem touches upon a universal theme of not succumbing to temptation. Booze and cigarettes form one part of these temptations, universally recommended by almost everyone even though they are fully aware about their disastrous effects. Nice write. I feel you need to edit it, though.

[$êlvån]

I've written this to demotivate those who wanna give smoking a try!!
So don't take it as a motivating poem:)

[I'm Just me:)]

wow that is awesome i love it its like how i feel cause i do wanna try it!

[Thea]

Well...I agree...Smoking is just really addictive though I haven't tried and I'm not planning to, haha! You've created a great poem here...It was enjoyable...
:)))

[Wondering Mind]

Ah yes! When a desire becomes a sick habit...Nicely written, especially since it's coming from a non-smoker.

[Manpreet]

Nice work! Honest and bold!

[reflectingus]

We made decisions everyday, and sometimes, it's human nature to be wrong, do the wrong thing, fall into peer pressure. I must say, you have done an impressive job, discussing about nicotine, almost perfect from a smoker's perspective, because that's probably how they feel. I understand it's hard to quit, and for those who chose the wrong path must be suffering now, and that just really reminds me how we must choose wisely. Humble, honest poem, great job.

[Arte]

Nice poem, thanks for sharing!

[Jack Isaac]

Smoking is a good thing because of all the tax revenue. Have you ever seen all that black soot in the snow along the highway? How much of that goes into our lungs? Burning gasoline at stop lights that never change to green is a good thing for Gulf, Shell, and BP. But then to get back to your poem... lol... that which makes me think makes me drink... and the drinker I sit here the smoker I get... in other words, nice writing!

[Shay]

its so true to people who are addicted, ive never smoked and never will but for the people i know who are they would def agree with this poem