ITS THE END

Sometimes or many i may be wrong,
for which today i am sorry for my soul. 
Pained a lot today ,
in fact it did happened earlier. 


was bothered least for me,
as i found me in you,
but Today its a clear sky,
a lot more true,


let my life be boring as before,
let my soul rest in dark,
let me sleep in peace,
a long sleep without dreaming you. . 
I wanna lay deep still forever,
rather than crying awake. 


For the above i am leaving,
as it was ,
and i promise my soul won't insist,
as nothing really did existed.
All was fake and at last am sorry for my heart for getting f***** by you

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice write and emotion, I think with the cuss word at the end that you should just spell it out but that's just my thought. I like these parts:
"as i found me in you,
but Today its a clear sky,
a lot more true,"

"a long sleep without dreaming you. .
I wanna lay deep still forever,
rather than crying awake. "

[Leslie Philibert]

Liked the use of i in the lower case, a bit e e cummings, and the way you XXX out the word in the last line, I`m probably a bit of a nerd, but f...k is a word I read too often on this website. The poem reads well, I like the way you write, you have talent.

[Manpreet]

Anger , Pain Love and sadness expressed together. The best thing about this work is that the readers feels the volcano of emotions in each line. I would say an honest write!

[Pax]

nice, a deep sorrow with just wanting to sleep in peace without dreaming of someone who you've lost. wonderful in conveying your sorry into writing.

[Monica-Antoinetta-Magda..]

This is an honest and deep piece of writing, you have a talent for conveying emotions through words (: keep it up.

[victoria]

oh I can feel your emotional wretchedness....

[Honey54]

whoa I can feel all your emotions in this piece...especially on the last line..NICE

[Kuhr Gred]

sometimes.. we better to learned are mistakes ;).. but great write :)
- Kuhr Gred

[Shay]

the flow is extremely well written, i especially liked the second and third stanza. the last line of the last stanze def makes a lasting impact

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww. wow. I love this. It's so deep, direct, and simply full of emotions...
I love the flow and your words.
Great write!