I'M INCOMPLETE WITHOUT YOU

The love seemed to be fantasy,
which i pretended to be deep for you,..
consequences of your pleads,
made to to accept the truth..
 
But today i'm alone,
and wondering what would i have been,
if you held my hand,
and lead my soul further...
 
Although i'm dead today,
with no tears left to shed,,
but still i've the power,
to reunite my lost soul...
 
You left me the past winter,
and least did the leaves grew,
for now i'm unnoticed tree,
 
i tried to move on,
but each in hurdle i cried for you,
for you were my power,
who knew that's not for ever....
 
I'm still missing u,
maybe only at sad times,
for i least had them,
when your love rode me over!!:(

Reviews

[Opposum]

It was an awsome poem but there were a few words missing,doubled, and some comma and period troubles that I retyped for you. Luckally none of the words needed changing :) thanks for the write dude(sorry dude is a wierd word huh?

The love seemed to be fantasy,
which I pretended to be deep for you,..
consequences of your pleads,
made to accept the truth...

But today I'm alone,
and wondering what I would have been,
if you held my hand,
and lead my soul further...

Although I'm dead today,
with no tears left to shed,
but still I've the power,
to reunite my lost soul...

You left me the past winter,
and least did the leaves grow,
for now I'm an unnoticed tree,

I tried to move on,
but each in hurdle I cried for you,
for you were my power,
who knew that's not for ever....

I'm still missing you,
maybe only at sad times,
for I least had them,
when your love rode me over!!:(


P.s. tell me when or your done with this / if you arent going to use this so I can remove the restating

[Diwakar - "The Warrior ..]

A strong emotion of love in this......I like the way you have showed the hopelessness...and grief......nice job :-)

[Shay]

i like the emotion and it was eaasy to relate to

[J. J. Nightingale]

A little sad .. I feel the longing here .. (remember "I" is always capital) ..

I like the last line ...

Good effort .. Jazz

[Monica]

This is a beautiful poem with such powerful words.

But today i'm alone,
and wondering what would i have been,
if you held my hand,
and lead my soul further...

...intense emotions. Well done!

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Great effort!....nice lines..keep it up)

[Sleeping Maiden]

omg...this made me feel so sad! =( But this is so wonderful at the same time. The feelings were so strong.. i could feel it. Very touching and moving. Magnificient poem!! I adore it sooo much..

"But today i'm alone,
and wondering what would i have been,
if you held my hand,
and lead my soul further...

Although i'm dead today,
with no tears left to shed,,
but still i've the power,
to reunite my lost soul..."

Powerful lines.. ^^

Love is the most expressive feeling ever.. and the one that can crush one's soul...
Brilliant write!!

[rivers]

This is a beautiful soul searching sentiment...You have captured a very emotional realization and penned it well...

"But today i'm alone,
and wondering what would i have been,
if you held my hand,
and lead my soul further"...

Keep hope alive and listen to your heart, which I might add, speaks beautifully...Well done.

[I'm Just me:)]

awwww that is soo sweet and kinda how i feel about someone:D great write!! message me!

[Queen Empress]

"I'm still missing you" that's what i'm feeling right now :).great poem!!