There's so much said here, with just a few words. Not just your heart, but the whole poem is so damn heavy, one couldn't move it even if they tried. You did a phenomenal job of conveying how it felt, because the poem envelops the reader's heart with that same immovable weight, and the poem just kind of stays with you.
Also, I read this (many times) before I listened to it, and the voice in my head was much different than what I heard when you spoke it. But once I listened to it, and heard you, it just sounded right.
this may be an arse-about-face way of reviewing a poem, starting with the last stanza but it called to mind that scene in apocalypse now where the ceiling fan spins and we hear the blade of a helicopter turn and there was something of a battle-weary sense to this poem. i have had to move my heart around like that -- this piece resonated a lot. simple, direct and honest.
Wow!! I loved this from the openning line all the way through. This is amazing. It actually made stop and really question myself about how this made me feel. I really enjoyed this piece a lot. Was written beautifully. Thanks for sharing.
I guess I create a voice for the writer everytime I read something that they have written, and the voice I would have picked out for you didn't match your real voice. However, I think that this was well written and if you find out where all the good guys are hiding, let me know. When you used the words "sky-eyed", I painted a picture. I love how you are able to do that somtimes. This was a good write.
Wow, I love this poem Trish, I'm glad I could help inspire it. I haven't heard it yet, I'm at work, but I get the same feelings on this one, like you -mine.
It was short and sweet and simply beautiful in it's misery. It jerks you around.
Good work trisha,