Wow! Your words I can really feel and it is written with so much emotion and depth and I jutst love the title! :) You go gurl! LOL! Great write Miss Trisha! Hope to read more from you in the future! :) One luv gurl!
i love this trisha! like you're just wasting time, waiting for someone worthwhile to come along. this write has a really strong voice ... i'd love to hear it in Evoca, but it's a great write even though!
Your voice in no way took away from the poem. On the contrary, your voice added much to the piece. Your voice conveyed a sadness and longing for love, that words alone would not have done.
You did a wonderful job with this poem, using your beautiful voice to convey your emotions.
Very well written, very well read.
Wow what a lonely feel you have expressed very deeply with this piece..."doing all the wrong things right" I know that all to well... finding yourself doing everything you can to humiliate and embarrass yourself and ruining any chances for the good thing in life to happen and trying to figure out why you keep sabotaging yourself... yes i have been there... well structured and powerful piece. Oh and your voice is great for reading your work!!
Wow. I really like this. It is very lonely and desperate, but self-examining-aware. You put my favorite line in bold. Good choice. Thank you so much for inviting me to read this.
I don't think your real voice takes away from your poetic voice at all. IN FACT, I think it's perfect. I can hear the emotion in your voice as I read the poem, very nicely done. I love it.
Awww... But beyond the emotions of this, which are great...let me say I loved your imagery...
such as "staring at the ceiling fan SKY-EYED"..... and this is nit-picking, not a slam, but are they blue [emotional and literal] or dark [emotional and literal].
And I loved the repetition of "wrong" in the first stanza...very effective in setting the tone of the poem.