What hides my heart

"Let's do this, together."

I'm not sure where to start

This isn't a story

But it isn't a poem either

Call it

a token

When does a story begin

At birth

At death

Or in the middle

I'm not sure

I didn't just

Fall in love with you

I did much more than that

I wanted to take you away

From everything

Like a small animal

I wanted you in my small world

My world in which I felt alone

At first I hated you

You were everything I wanted to be

You were strong,

Kind,

Independent,

You had a hard life

And I?

I grew up in a nice family

I grew up safe and secure

Hidden from the outside

With a weak spine

And a different outlook on things

We were polar opposites

But that's not what I was attracted to

It was that I could actually love someone

Who would love me back

And I was scared, at first

We were young

But one could never understand

How strongly we

felt for each other

I know I'm not the best person in the world

Sadistic

Shy

Lazy

All those things in one five year old ball

We were merely in middle school

But you

You were like the adult in my life

I never got to look up to

I have a loving mother

At the time, my step father wasn't grand

Neither were the friends I chose to have

Neither were my brothers

My sister was like my own daughter

And at first, everything we did was wrong

Holding hands

Being together

Kissing

That was, until you were there for me

Through everything

Through the dark

When I was crying

Yeah you could be a bit cruel

But

I still love you

It's been two years since we've met

I'm nearly sixteen now

Just as you are

And all I want to do

Is wrap my arms around you

And keep you safe

Just like my writing

Safe with the haven of my heart

Even though it's hard

The small crystals that line up

Spelling out your name

My name

What our future holds

So many things we gave up

Like the rights that we couldn't have

Just because we chose to love each other

The things you don't care about

The jealousy you feel

When you never tell me

You are an Aquarius, 

I am a Taurus

But I still love you

We defy all logic

And even when I feel left alone

I feel like I can somehow find a way to protect you

I am not god

But I trust him to trust in me

To protect and guide you

Even if you don't believe in god

You are still his child

And I believe

That he led me to you for a reason

Because you changed my life

You were there when it hurt the most

You were there when I was exposed to the darkness

You were there when you were hurting

And even if you weren't

It was because you were afraid, you were very afraid

And this could go on forever really

But I'll end it here

For the most beautiful girl in the world

I love you

And nothing will change that

Author's Note

Just a small poem for me and my girlfriend.....small lol. Yeah.

Reviews

[Erica Ross]

AWWWWWW this is beautiful :) I once fell for an Aquarius woman myself. What an amazing feeling.

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

amazing.

[Sami Khalil]

A lovely ode to her...:)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

You are very articulate and this poem certainly emphasises yourinquiring mind, and your analytical approach, well done!

[s y e]

Awwwww, this was so sweet. She's a lucky girl, I'm sure she loved it. This was really sweet and I wish you both the best :)

[Just Kim]

Very lovely write and read

[Terohime]

I could feel a lot of devotion in this poem. I enjoyed it a lot.
~Res

[KeeD]

:) She's a lucky one, this was really sweet. You sound like a good person, keep the warm spirit lit always.

[Astro]

One thing you say, early is that it isn't a poem, but it is. It's an ode, to everything you feel about this girl. The things that you maybe can't seem to say to her, or couldn't make clear anyway. It is a very nice piece and I could give you lots of advice, based on what you've described, but it wouldn't be writing advice. The only thing I would have to say, is like my other reviews, I think that your expressions and choice of words affects the flow of your writing, but the overall message in this medium, as opposed to your story writing is still evident. And...very beautiful.

[Rivaxorus]

Thanks a lot, for some reason when I write my words come out weird because I want to make it more....fun sounding I guess. A lot of people including my english teachers have told me my sentences make no sense at times, so I guess that's one thing I should work on, thanks again though ^w^

[Harrisen Viator]

Young love, this is awesome. I never have had a girl that I wanted to write a poem for, so this is something I am not able to relate to, but that doesn't mean I can't feel the love you have for her. This is really cool and I wish the best for both of you! Because, believe me, heartache is not a fun road to travel down.

"Safe with the haven of my heart" may I suggest "within" instead of "with"

[Rivaxorus]

There was one point where we tried not to be together, and that was just. There was no feeling to describe it, at first I was like, I'm too young to decide this anyway, but now me and her just don't want to let each other go. But I'm certain there's a girl out there for you. And I do wish the best. I can't imagine how people deal with heart break if they loved that person they broke up with O.o I barely lasted a week before we ended up apologizing the heck to each other xD. And thanks ^w^

[Harrisen Viator]

That's awesome dude, I'm glad that it worked out for you two. And yeah heart break is not a fun thing to deal with, but it seems to me like you won't have to deal with that, at least not anytime soon. And thanks dude, there's hope for everyone haha.