Mourning Snow

And I opened my eyes to a world in disguise of reality. Moisture stretched violently from the eyes. Vision hazed, bending blind light before me. Through a god to test logic splits my direct line. I’ll lay against the still evergreen and take breath in repeat. The sunburst sky sinks passed me as the still evergreen ascend my soul as if being pulled towards heavens delight.

My mind empties congested pasts and sorrows into the atmosphere that whispers a cold yet tumbling warmth. A cold warmth I’ll suffer to see envelope me in two. Far to long I’ve laid against the evergreen grass taking breath.

“And from the atmosphere a snow fall”

And I close my eyes to a world in disguise of reality. A Beautiful voice fades into my thoughts showered in the essence of a goddess. My vision begins to focus . Her eyes divine entangle my dear heart. Its as if I have never loved before the evergreen sunburst snowfall. I could reach towards you, but in so many pieces I’ve become fearful the rest I will crave.

So please just leave me ensconced in the snow bank. I promise not to make a sound and remain still in awe of this disguise of reality for its amazing to open my eyes and have violently stretched tears amend with in the frozen vapors of this life.

　

Reviews

[Legacy]

Sehkmet,

Moisture stretched violently from the eyes...
Foremost: a sentence with this much power, should be followed up with a comma and another powerful statement... just keep smacking them with your power.

And here:
Through a god to test logic splits my direct line

WOW! Okay, so maybe combing more of these sentences? At times we are so worried about carrying on a run-on sentence that we break that powerful feeling too soon.

(YOU HAVE WORDS)

Further:

My mind empties congested pasts and sorrows into the atmosphere that whispers a cold yet tumbling warmth.

The start was right from the gate ready to win the race and followed up peacefully trotting... Nice and Complex.

Finally:

I promise not to make a sound and remain still in awe of this disguise of reality for its amazing to open my eyes and have violently stretched tears amend with in the frozen vapors of this life.

This line is all too brilliant to pass by, however, it does need to be broken up a bit to bask in its power.

In conclusion, this piece is a powerful force of nature... I respect it in all aspects.

Wonderfully Written and Powerfully Read!

Have a great day,

Legacy