Within Poets' Minds

Within Poets’ Minds

By:SeemsPoetic

Slowly drifting

Thoughts abound

Frantic scripting

Lines aloud

Pain with purpose

From poets’ mouths

Emotions flowing

Hear the sound

Pen on paper

Forever bound

Human nature

Hear them out

Down to earth

High in the clouds

Vast Universe

Questioning now

Life and death

When and how

No rules allowed

Each of their lines

One slab of stone

But now a tower

Through their words

Feel the power

Whether peace of mind

Or darkness devour

Up late at night

The witching hour

So wide awake

With tired sighs

Challenging fate

Deep inside

Calm insights

And raging tides

Imagination

Their better side

Within creation

True knowledge lies

In every question

Double meaning hides

They draw it out

They shed new light

Thoughts on paper

Passing through time

Hand prints on history

They cannot die

Painting portraits

For readers eyes

True emotions

On the rise

Touching hearts

And changing lives

All is possible...

Within Poets' Minds

Reviews

[ElizaB]

You challenge a lot of oppositions within your poem. To me, it felt dream-like, these are the kinds of things that enter one's mind when they cannot rest, yet they need to. Your language and narrative work well, although I feel the enjambment detracts from your subject matter. It feel that the points you are making are not given the pause they deserve, and believe me, they deserve reflection!

I particularly liked the lines:
'Pen on paper
Forever bound'

You sum up perfectly what it is to be a poet or a creative soul. You are bound to your art form (whatever it may be) and you cannot exist in any situation without becoming inspired or taking something away to contemplate later. To be bound to words for an eternity seems a blessing; I wonder, do you agree?...

Best wishes,
Eliza

[Nolo Segundo]

I like the style of this poem-- you make it work [not everyone does]-- congrats on your win.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

thanks for entry into my current competition, brilliant

[Onlyme]

Brilliant write. Bravo.. Nothing more to be stated.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

brilliant write, thanks for entry into why i write competition

[Coyote Poetry]

The poet's mind. A dangerous place to know. I did liked the thoughts and the logic of your words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Jon Roggie]

Write your words. Part of being a poet.

[JayG]

Really hard to follow, given that there are no regular stanzas, no predictable rhyming, and short lines.

When you read this, intent guides how you speak it, and what meaning to take. But the reader has no access to your mind, so they have only what the words suggest to them. Given that, how does a reader relate, "Slowly drifting" and "Frantic scripting," when they have no idea of where we are in time or space or what's going on?

Next: if you're going to rhyme, then rhyme. But do so in a way that supports the rhythm of the piece, not with a rhyme tossed in here and there. Part of the reason for structured poetry is to make the reader a partner. The predictable stanza length and rhyming structure, plus what prosody does for the cadence of the piece, are important, just as it is to music.

A good introduction to structured poetry can be found in the Amazon excerpt to Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. And a great introduction to the effect prosody and a strong rhyming scheme can have can be seen in Robert W. Service's, The Cremation of Sam McGee. It's over 100 years old now, and still great fun. This site has both the poem and an analysis of why, and how, it works:
https://www.shmoop.com/cremation-sam-mcgee/

[lessa (kenzie)]

A very nicely written write, enjoyed