SIX BILLION PEOPLE, ONE OF THEM, IS RIGHT FOR YOU!

A sad short emotion , which states how is true love disappearing from this world.

And there she stood heartbroken. He said she is either emotionally damaged or emotionally unavailable. She was striving hard to understand the gist of it. She gave him all she could. She thought their souls were meant to be. And that they were soul mates. After all that’s what he said. She was flooded with all these thoughts and emotions striking her every microsecond. Was that all fake?
She now questions herself and God; about existence of true love? Her faith of prince charming , the right one for her. Will he ever show up? Or has he died? Or what

This was the moment which took her into that state of mind where she knew, all love is for physical pleasure. She was damaged. Not because she thought love exists. Because she thought it EXISTED.
There in that moment , she held her heart , locked it forever to keep it safe from all these desperado around. This is when she knew, she will seek pleasure in physical things only.
This is when one more true lover, a girl with love fantasy died!

Author's Note

Just a thought highlighting reality!

Reviews

[UN Owen]

Could use some commas, I think. Otherwise, I feel that the piece feels odd to read, as it doesn't really flow so much as it gets read out as if fed through a punch-card-reading device.

In a similar vein, you could do better to add some variety to how you refer to your protagonist. It feels clunky reading "She" over and over again. I think you're going for an everywoman kind of thing, but you can vary your subjects while still keeping that. Things like "the heartbroken girl", "the once-starry-eyed lover", and so on. Just different ways of identifying her. In doing so, you can build a closer feeling of connection between the reader and your protagonist.

I feel that your two sentences "She thought their souls were meant to be. And that they were soul mates." should be merged together. As it is, the second sentence feels redundant, as it effectively repeats the first. I would suggest either choosing a different word for soulmates (or soul), or perhaps change one of the sentences to focus more on promises of their love lasting forever (which I imagine would fit into the piece just fine.)

Your second paragraph "She now questions herself..." (it looks like it's meant to be a second paragraph, since you started a new line for it) seems to have some words missing. "about existence of true love" should be "about >>the

EDIT: My apologies, but it seems something occurred and the latter-portion of my review was cut off. Cannot be recovered. I hope you'll forgive me for leaving this half-formed as it is.

[SeemiAli]

Thanks alot for your review. I will keep all of it in mind before writing next. :)

[Veronica Ostling-Hirsch..]

I love the idea, it just seems too happy. Maybe it's the punctuation; I didn't feel sad, only indifferent near the end.

[SeemiAli]

Ill work on the weak points :)

[Veronica Ostling-Hirschberg]

Please do! I'm eager to read the final draft of this! Thank you also, for taking the time to write it!

[SeemiAli]

Ill get back to you all, with this, as soon as possible.

[Kevin]

I'm not really one for big emotional passages about soul-mates and stuff so this isn't really for me. That being said, I very much enjoyed this to the point of it being shelved in my favorites. Very nice writing

[SeemiAli]

Thanks mate. I hope next time I come up with something of your interest :)