Surrender

Let me show you what true love can be
Surrender in passion with me

lets soar past the trees flying high
drift in the clouds our bodies intertwined

embraced in one another's arms
With tender kisses that take us further beyond

Please don't give just a passing glance
Come fly with me...just give it a chance.

Reviews

[kurrupted]

Nay a classic piece of poetry. Short, deep and thought provoking.
While no earthling could refuse to give in to such a requested yearning... i see the theme as very relative.
thumb up? nah! double thumbs up...and thanks for sharing.

I particularly like the concluding lines

"Please don't give just a passing glance
Come fly with me...just give it a chance."
BELIEVE ME ALOT OF US LET BEAUTIFUL THINGS PASS US BY BY JUST GLANCING AND NOT GIVING IT A CHANCE...FOR INDEED ALL BEAUTIFUL THINGS COMEBY AND OR HAPPEN TO WHAT ALOT OF US VIEW AS BY JUST A MERE COINCIDENCE

[Eagle Cruagh]

Like many of the greatest talents, you deliver
a powerful blow with so few words.

This expands on the word, "surrender", leaveing
no doubt in the mind of the reader.

Exciting, seductive and erotic, written with talent,
passion and enthusiasm.

Very nice poem.

Thank you !

------ Eagle Cruagh

[Fran Marie]

lets soar past the trees flying high
drift in the clouds our bodies intertwined

A delightful and descriptive piece ~ what a lovely

way to surrender one's love~Fran

[Tom Benson]

Now who could refuse an invitation like that ? Delightful and short enough to enjoy in one sitting. Tom

[Wildecat]

A beautiful love poem, thanks for sharing.

[Blackrose]

Nice :) Really enjoyable, sometimes a short poem is so much better than a long one :)

[Poets Soul]

A delightful read this morning. Enjoed this piece. :) ty PS