MERE XVI

Please let me out! Let go of me.

I wanted to discover things my way, and I just want to be independent.

Yeah you care for me and for my safety because you’ve been wrapped by the bad things you heard in news.

Well thanks for that, but it can't stop me from fulfilling my dreams.

Sorry but I don't want to stay in this cheese less station.

Why don't you let go of me? I've been with you for the past two decades,

And I think it's quite enough! I want to enjoy my next eight decades, so give it to me.

I have a lot of dreams, plans and schemes.

Don't worry your still included I'll give you a good life.

All I ask is to don't stop me when the time comes that I want to set the sail for myself.

Like what they say, "It's good to be out there on an adventure in the maze."

Don't you want me to experience the bliss I long desire? Please don't be so selfish.

Just accept the fact that children merely come and go;

And parents do become empty nesters, sorry for the phrase. 

Reviews

[CHRIS ANDES]

WITTY THOUGHTS
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[Seanne Tholltree]

oui

[Coyote Poetry]

"Just accept the fact that children merely come and go;
And parents do become empty nesters, sorry for the phrase. "
I like the logic of the poem. Need to free the children to dream and test life. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[natzky]

really awesome seanne..heheh...they will let go of you for sure worry no more..:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The veracity with which you pen the simple is nothing short of perfection, a clever piee indeed old friend.

[Amata Luna]

Hmm... I can fairly see and look into the picture with these words of yours. Nicely written and full of emotions. You did well once again, but then again, I can fairly 'guess' for a moment who you are referring to. Don't worry, all would work good and fine. I've been past the experience and soon you'll see everything will be fine. :)) Thanks for sharing another good piece and your heart.

[Zackery Alan Daley]

I thought it was like a punk song for a second. It sounds much better read aloud as opposed to reading it. A sign of good material in my opinion.

[S. Michael Long]

i think that some people may not know what a cheese less station is..maybe they do but i dont.. i want to though.. it causes a rift in the flow of the poem for me.. other than that this is a beutifully written and well thought out poem.. normally i dont like prose (well i do, but those who teach me tell me stay away lol) And in this case i love the form.. it lends well to the reader.. for me.. -s

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice write with tons of emotion and showing the urge of exploring life it seems.

[MoriartyMesa]

Strange poem of oppression but meaningful and not lacking of strength on word alone.